Gifts

Gifts

A Poem by Leah Mayes
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Love is a gift...

"

My gift… adrift… now damp with an old memory

Like a message in a bottle… forever inscribed

And inside… you never opened… how surprised

That you didn't know which key to choose

Amused… by your infinite journey

Astral insight through the night

It's not a dream… every beam is coming apart at the seam

And when the dam breaks… the gift is still drifting

Further out to sea… letting you be 

Alone… in your comfort zone… searching for home 

Yet I see… the gift… left unopened 

Will still be addressed to thee…

© 2016 Leah Mayes


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Unrequited or broken love? Made me genuinely sad. At first I didn't like the line breaks you used, but by the end of the poem, I found them very effective as they give a very theatrical/performance feeling to the piece. Very succinct, clear, and relatable image with the bottle. Normally I'd think the message in the bottle idea would be cliche, but I did not feel that way when reading the piece for some reason, almost as if you breathed new life into the concept :)

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Unrequited or broken love? Made me genuinely sad. At first I didn't like the line breaks you used, but by the end of the poem, I found them very effective as they give a very theatrical/performance feeling to the piece. Very succinct, clear, and relatable image with the bottle. Normally I'd think the message in the bottle idea would be cliche, but I did not feel that way when reading the piece for some reason, almost as if you breathed new life into the concept :)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 9, 2008
Last Updated on August 13, 2016
Tags: Break up, love

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Leah Mayes
Leah Mayes

Indianapolis, IN



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