Time

Is it really time?
Can I give you my heart?
Have you finally made up your mind?
Will our love story start?

Yesterday, I gave up
Today, you swept me away
I am still waiting for tomorrow.
And the promise of forever

I think it might be time
To take that secret key
And put it in your hand,
Let you take all of me.

I’ve been waiting
I thought the time would never come
And that the garden of my heart
Would lie fallow in the Sun

And now I am glad
That I waited for you
And the gift I am giving you
Is still brand new.

You are beautiful
Our love will be beautiful too
You are the man I longed for
I still can’t believe its true.
 

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww...so sweet. And very heartfelt. I love the feelings expressed here and the imagery is really nice. Great poem! ^^

[Orlando Murcia]

Very heart felt and beautiful.

Great write

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Really sweet. I love the imagery of the "Key". This is a very strong symbol. Sweet!

[Lizzy]

This is great...I loved it...it was really great...a PERFECT poem...all the elements, you expanded...I really loved it...thank you for sharing. :)

[Dillon Cotter]

really nice poem, good vibe and emotions, very good!

[jdog]

this was great. i really enjoyed reading this. daedal word choice. please check this story out and tell me what you think http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/zzjordan89zz/450998/

[An owl on the moon]

What an amazingly tender, lifting write that makes the spirit smile. Love that is shared sacred between two people is so deeply beautiful, like your words here. Amazing!

[Spit_and_Prayers]

This poem makes me smile, I particularly like the lines: "And that the garden of my heart
Would lie fallow in the Sun" that's just great metaphor. I also enjoy the 2-4 rhyming scheme, that's always been one of my favorite. Ah to young and in love, oh wait I am, and this poem reminds me of how its so wonderful.

[Vesa Lee]

Oh this is so incredible sweet.
The innocence and youthful longing just sings as I read each word.
..............
I think it might be time
To take that secret key
And put it in your hand,
Let you take all of me.
..............
My -only- suggestion is possibly changing the title.
Normally I wouldn't even do that, but I just feel that the one you have now does no justice to the poem it claims.
Either way though, whoever reads this can only be left smiling.
Well done. ^-^

[Twilight]

This is very nice, and well written! A fine tribute to that special someone, in your life. I am pleased for you, Leah! Also, you have kept a true poetic structure (four lines per verse), some eloquent wording, and a good rhyme scheme. This is also a romantic poem, without any unnecessary references to carnal themes (or words).

Thankyou, for sharing these pleasant thoughts and feelings with us!

Continuing to share our Christian faith!


Julian