Spinning Death

Spinning, spinning

Round and Round,

Through this life,

and awful sound,

Pounding, Pounding,

life or death,

Upon my heart,

this awful death.

Drip,Drip

Far away,

This shortened life,

It falls away,

Spinning, Spinning

Round and Round,

Lowered slowly,

Into the ground.

Reviews

[Awkward]

I like these kind of poems. Very simple and short yet they suit the tone and the message is still very strong. Good job. Thank you for sharing

[darkness*star1985]

great work

[cfix]

Wow, powerful write here, very well written and expressed.

[Rayne Stanton]

wow laylay really good write =) i love the way it keeps the reader thinking

[Jake Staffeld]

Wow Layla. This poem has definent flow. Very well done.

[Dai Edenburough]

Cool sound! As I was reading it, my head was spinning, spinning round and round!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

This poem does indeed spin you around, until the fatal end. Great words my friend.

[Shane Williams]

short sentances seen to really suit this tone of poem not sure why

[Little Abbey]

Ooohh sad... :( But it has a cool sound.