Mirror

At times I walk the lonely road
of choice or not, I cannot know
trying to change my course for good
what's stopping me I cannot see

It's a twofold mirror
and I can't make it crack
stay and fight or run and hide
the vision just keeps coming back

Give me a reason, show me a key
even your image has somehow escaped me
It shouldn't be so hard to fight for myself
and it doesn't seem right to cry out for some help

This part-time depiction is slightly a lie
a reflection of fear and a half-lost high
It's time for a change, the picture unclear
But the answer is really the worst thing to fear

It's a twofold mirror
and I can't make it crack
stay and fight or run and hide
the vision just keeps coming back

but now, again, I begin to face
the barrier preventing a change of pace
as the figure comes clear and now I see
I find the image I'm looking at... is me.

Author's Note

Any comments/critiques would be nice.

Reviews

[Nate E. Flake (Cösmic ..]

I like the rhyme scheme at the end of occasional line in the stanzas. Also this piece has a sort rhythmatic feel that might reflect that of lyrics. The poem though, tells of a lost soul who aims to elude their image and perception of themselves. The person probably also wants to escape avoid their prior life.
Nonetheless this piece was well written.

[Revolved]

I love the ending! It's ironic. It floews so smoothly and I love the rhymes. Great poem! :D

[Voice]

Beautiful and deep. It has a wonderful flow and I completely love it�

Voice

[nostal]

I like it. Nice.

[Eagle Cruagh]

This is a hard piece to critique, because
it is very well constructed.
You have an excellent command of the language
and you demonstrate great talent and imagination.

Good work !

------ Eagle Cruagh

[H. G. ROBERT]

Loves it. The strongest part says it all:

"It's a twofold mirror
and I can't make it crack
stay and fight or run and hide
the vision just keeps coming back"

The road can be lonely toward self-discovery. However, it is necessary sometimes, to step away from the crowd and search within. But great gains will come after great losses. Loved the imagery.

[Chrity]

I like this because it's like as if it is saying that maybe you should look outside yourself for answers. To me it's saying that you need to be able to change yourself