Black Rose

2 way colab with Kimberly Melody Gutierrez and Eclipsing Moon

The silver sifted coat of dew.

 

while cooling with sprinkles of morning light,

 

relieves the burning in my finger tips

 

Cooling my essense of desire..

 

to find and share the Rose ...

 

with black petals,and unthorned..

 

Breaking day does not thwart...

 

essense of this quest.

 

Ages old and eons sung,

 

Of a rose so fair, black,

 

 and..minus barbs ...

 

with which to ensnare,

 

hand and heart of lover true.

 

divine be the day I find

the rarest rose of all

for with its petals a spell

be cast upon my lovers heart

 

and all shall be as it should

enchanted love by petals black

 

 

Reviews

[Larry Dyson]

I loved this, dear friend, didn't knew you wrote a collab with my soul sister, I couldn't expect less than this would be a masterpiece, my favorite part: "divine be the day I find the rarest rose of all" I don't know who wrote it but it could be both of you, as I know you :) this was splendid, as I loved your latest review! thanks a lot dear friend.

E.L.

[Larry Dyson]

yes your soul sister wrote a lot of it...she has the wings to fly you know..?making it just perfect in balance.Laury

She does really. She's amazing, not afraid to face things, a true honest soul, I admire and appreciate, just as you!

[Judas Hammer]

I am searching for that rose as well. I really like the metaphor and the feeling and emotion behind this work. Colorful and flows beautifully.

[Larry Dyson]

thanx jh..sometimes I believe it takes being there (you know ...one of those ones who has to experience it instead of being told)Dia de Los Muertos is one of those places...means so much more..LAury

[Chris]

I like the after echoes...

[Southern Cross]

The quest for love is eternal as you both so eloquently expressed

[Muse]

I like how you are reaching out to other artist to inspire your own words. With this said...writers block should never be an excuse if we allow others to penetrate our thoughts. The rose...so symbolic, yet there is nothing cliche about this poem.

Ages old and eons sung,



Of a rose so fair, black,

and..minus barbs ...

with which to ensnare,

hand and heart of lover true.


You both write of old love..new love...future love. The rose and it's many manifestations...with both beauty, light, darkness.

Perfection.


:)))

[Ruth]

This is divine!
Superb collaboration, gorgeously woven, blended with an aura that thrills xoxo

[Doreen]

This is a very interesting read. It's romantic with a dark undertone. I like it. This part seems disjointed:

Of a rose so fair, black and...
sin barbs with which to ensnare

It reads like a line or a word is missing. Or is it I who is missing something?

[Larry Dyson]

I used the spanish word sin without /minus and it threw you I guess..I reworded it so how does it read now?..

[Doreen]

Ah, yes. That's better. It's no longer disjointed this way, in my humble opinion. I like this piece very much.

[Larry Dyson]

ty so much for the honest comment..always appreciated..Laury

[olla]

nicely done.. I have read many tales of the magic rose in my lifetime.. it holds a a certain mystique that always draws me in..

[Larry Dyson]

ty olla..it is a colab with Kimberly Melody Gutierrez

[olla]

yes.. but I didn't see where she had posted it.. I would have left a comment for her as well..

[olla]

I thought you might like to know.. I sent Kimberly a personal note to let her know how much I enjoyed this piece.. recognition is important.. I was remiss in not doing it sooner..