Pitiful Moon

let me take away your tears

for they cause craters on your face

why must you cry so much

your skin a gray paste

you wallow, sullen and dark

but when the night falls

you show your heart

bright and true

just a sliver of you

shines so bright and so few

what are you but the moon 

a woman cold and far

the only company just a star

so alone and plain

for the she knows no name

by which to call on

no love to fall from

for she is the pale light

that ironically lights a lovers night

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

Oh my friend I was not in best of mood when I read this it hit me right there and sudden..how nice
Let me take your tears away they mar your face,why must you cry as much
you wallow sullen and dark but at night you show all heart,bright and true all over you
you are the moon ,she cold and far,your star,she knows no name to call on you
God how lovely ,and nice,so beautiful those words were..every word was in its place
i could not think of a better wording to convey such lovely images..you are a wonder
lovely write..

[Silvario]

this is a beautifuly written piece. you have an amazing talent in your way with words. i love the smooth fluid flow and tempo of this piece. so well penned and so pleasing to read.

well done indeed :)

[Sean M. Addams]

very interesting piece like the imagery and detail in this alot... overall i thought you did a great job with this... keep up the great writes...

[E.j.aka.Hannah]

aww....we have matching poems now! Yay!!!