Beast in the beauty.

" This is a tribute to the inner me,"

"didnt your mother warn you about girls like me...."

your breath heaves as you look at me

oh you know you want it

you really like what you see..

but sweetie dont touch

your eyes decieve

you dont know enough

of what i can be

im the girl from your dreams

i seem so sweet

you want to make me scream

i'll knock you off your feet

but im not an angel

not even in the least

i am not the beauty

i am the beast

ill pull you in

like the catch that you are

and ill get inside

and you cant run far.

ill make you believe

that i really care

and ill eat your heart

cause you put me there

i am not sweet

im very bitter

i break hearts like a pro

i wont stop, im no quiter

because i've been scorned

once too much

i will not grieve

i will destruct

cause im one hell of a b***h

who likes to hurt

you'll hate me now

but i can do worse

so listen to your mother

when she tells you to stay away

for you mess with the devil

i'll leave you in decay..

 

 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

Oh this is nice
You like what you see but dont touch,eyes all deceive,you never know me much
the one in your dreams..sweet that you want make me scream,I am not that angel
You are just me catch,now that in i am your your heart ,I will eat you away..I break hearts like a pro
I destroy ,the one b***h from hell,why ever messed with the devil..and he says..I just loved that devil
I really loved this..you portrayed some kind of a girl ,I dont know if thats you..
but I guess there is a little like that in every girl..on the whole I really loved this
lovely write..

[alan khan]

the title and the opening line had me hooked. than from there it was just a kickas read. really nice job with this. i enjoyed it a lot.

[Sean M. Addams]

wow!! i liked this alot.... I always like the childrens classics turned twisted and dark.. i like how you turned it and made beauty the beast... very impressive write... liked this one alot!!!

[vandana]

well written liked the idea...quite a nice piece of poetry.

[Vesa Lee]

I definitely like the idea of this piece and over-all I think it played out well.
The only thing that was a bit off was the flow and some of the rhymes.
However, because of how the poem is formatted, I'm sure it would be very difficult (if not impossible) to improve.
Really though, I think it's a great piece.
One all naive & love-sick men should take note of...^-^

[Jackson Yang]

Ok now I understand the description of yourself from your profile. But with such emotion flowing through your writing its hard not to like what I see. To start off as if speaking from the beauty and drawing them in as you speak of yourself as the beast. Im sure many people can relate to this poem, very well done.

[Flo]

oh very nicely written, >:D I FEEL THE HATE AND ANGER lol, pretty good, evil feelings around xD good write!
-Flo

[Domo]

Christ, someone was pissed. I can feel the creepiness in this, I would probably run from someone who told me this. I did truly love this poem though, it is one of your best so far. ☺
~D♥m♥~