Cheat, Lie and Deceit .

Ice has nothing

on how cold my heart is

hate has nothing

on how you all kill

you a backstabbing friend

the scar i dont think will ever mend

from how you betrayed

and crossed the line

you are not a friend

that i wil call mine

and you the lier

and how i believed

all the sweet lies

you fed to me

the truth was so far

for me to see

at least i have good memories

oh wait i dont..

now on to you

the deceiver

oh how i loved you

as you put me on

and led me astray

at least it was true

for maybe a day

or not..

see all your lies

all your deceit

made me how i am

made me this freak..

and now you'll tear me

all to peices

now i can see

 the pain never ceases

of the love

for a lier a cheat

and most of all

all your deceit...

 

 

Reviews

[Dominic Rosales]

Another great poem, do I even need to explain myself. Great job on how you described the relationship of the poem to us, it is touching and as of that, that is why it is a great poem. Keep up the good work!! :)

[Blackwood]

Its Angry its Direct, and it doesn't pretend to be anything more than what it is. I like it a lot, It actually expresses how i felt only a month or so ago. As far as critique on the actual writing I would say that only taking out the non-essential words, ans they hammered to me in class repeatedly would make this excellent.

[Orlando Murcia]

Very dark and angry
yet I love how you expressed yourself
in this piece hiding nothing

Excellent work

Orlando M