Miss you

There comes a time in life when you just have to think 

That somethings can change within a blink 

Making you regret things you have longed to say like I love you very much and will everyday

With the sun-shining high and the wind that blows, I say these words for you to hold

wherever you are keep hold of them tight until that day we can meet again 

I miss our chats and the peace they bought 

The knowledge of life you often taught 

"Follow your dreams to where they might go and always remember never to let go"

The special words I wish to say is that I love you dearly and miss you in every way.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Have you ever read "Where Does the Bown Bear Go"? This has that kind of vibe, and it's so mystical in its execution at the beginning, the ending, despite its grandeur feels anticlimactic. This has potential to be a song or a "Where Does the Brown Bear Go" type of ballad, but at the end you kind of lose the set musicality and it kind of falls flat. Some grammatical/poetical errors are present too, ("sun-shining" needs no hyphen, as it's not dually describing another noun; "regret *what you have longed to say" - better sound because "things" was used in the line above; then some line breaks (if you feel it necessary)).

But I did overall enjoy this. Don't mean to sound harsh in my critiques, I just feel this has more potential than you're giving it credit for.

Great start!

[Adam Adams]

"I miss our chats and the peace they bought... "

such and so much rapture be found in these words you cummed in. very deep here. may be, here you ain't just talkin' of one's love-life but also portraying the display of lovers. they oft. live through the moments together, and when the moments're turned into memories, what's left to 'em behind is nothing but... "peaceful chats"... which further awake 'em up overnight, but in a very moist & warmed ways. excellent work here. you bake very good stuffs stirring thoughtful ingredients of your thoughts in romantically delicious words. liked it!