crazier with you

i.
when the bruise coloured skies shed their skins
and left behind a thick, black night

you went with them.
watching you fade was like seeing the sun set for the last time

you had always been my light

ii.
we bloomed together in the summer's sun
and you would tell me you loved me
while we soaked under the stars
and kissed between childhood stories and current laughter

i like to think that our story was your favourite

iii.
i didn't want to get better
being crazier with you was all i could've asked for
from 11 am train rides to 5 pm adventures
i still feel the warmth in the tips of my fingers and toes
from when you pulled me into you

iv.
the world felt more vibrant and inviting
with you experiencing it with me
while i listen to your records, wishing you were here 
i only hope you want to step back into our world
there's been a lack of colour without you

Reviews

[Steph]

This is such a sweet and poignant poem! It's really touching. I loved the way you used roman numerals to introduce your stanzas, it's such a small thing but it was really effective. Your use of imagery is excellent and it truly painted a picture in my head. I especially loved the first section.

[Sami Khalil]

"we bloomed together in the summer's sun
and you would tell me you loved me
while we soaked under the stars"

A sweet and lovely poem. Very nice job...:)...............

[Laura]

thank you so much for the kind words, they are very much appreciated :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........

[Thomas]

I really liked this one I mean besides upper-casing your I's I thought it was wonderful. Really does feel like a different world when your in love doesn't it? Your third and fourth stanzas were my favorite because you painted the picture of the kind of relationship a lot look for, makes the reader feel as if they are a part of it! Brilliant job!

[Laura]

thank you so much for your review! i suppose the lack of capitalization was more of a stylistic decision, but i appreciate your review a lot. thanks again for the kind words, they mean so much :-)