little secrets

We let our wondering hang off the edge of ourselves
until it slipped from our loose grips.
The wanting came in waves,
crashing upon my worries and falling into your arms.

I was struck with trembling knees and a shy smile
as your hazel eyes flickered with each shared glance.
I was enslaved by your peppery skin and gentle touch.
Sleepyheads and smoke, stars soaked the sky as we shivered.

We dangled our knotted legs off the edge of that bench,
until our hands tangled to warm amongst the cold.
The moon waned to crescent,
sinking my fears and raising my lips to touch yours.

I was thrust back into the dark that November night
with your eyes acting as my candles.
I was falling, and our souls were flying.
Hazy heads, your hand finally mine to hold.

Reviews

[Levi Levin]

Oh how memories make great poems. Great job!

[Gee]

Beautifully written,sweet,romantic..

[Laura]

thank you very much, appreciate it!

[Justin]

that was really good, alot of emotion in it :) i enjoyed reading it :)

[Mike Cole]

I really like this I could really see the emotion that you put into your piece. This is really good keep writing!

[Adam M. Snow]

I truly love this. Keep on writing, I look forward to reading more.

[Laura]

Thank you so much, this means a lot. I'll be sure to keep writing! Thanks again :)

[Adam M. Snow]

You're utmost welcome

[Wolfwind]

I loved the descriptive weave of this piece. It really made the emotions come to life in a sureal way, making the poem a very memorable piece to read. The image that would come to mind was kinda like, love being a slinky and it just kept slinking down the cliff and onto the warf and onto the bench and right into the heart... Then the emotions went squish and everyone cheered. At least that's what kind jumped into my head.

Thanks for sharing your ink!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[Laura]

Thank you so much! Your comments are incredibly insightful, thoughtful, and much appreciated, as always. I really like your idea of love being a slinky- I hadn't thought of that.

Thank you so much, again!! xx

[Karen]

Beautiful romantic poem. I love the imagery, especially in the first stanza with the last two lines. There seems to be two things going on here: the physical and the emotional, and the dichotomy of hot and cold fits in beautifully with the physical (cold) and emotional (hot). Beautiful poem! Thank you for writing it and sharing it with us!

[Laura]

Wow, thank you so much for your incredibly kind words :) I really appreciate you taking the time to review! I'm really happy you enjoyed it. Thank you again, it means a lot.

[bobc]

Laura...well done here. Particularly liked '...the edge of ourselves' and '...your eyes acting as my candles'. ...bob

[Laura]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)

[SyberRose]

I love the emotions you have conveyed in this beautifully penned poem...enjoyed your romantic words...Rose

[Laura]

Thank you Rose, your review is much appreciated. I'm really glad you enjoyed, thanks again! :)

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning this wonderful poem...:)

[Laura]

Thank you so much for your review and kind words! Your work is fantastic yourself and it means a lot that you find my piece splendid. Thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly...You are welcome...:)