Thank You

From my heart to yours....

Many Thanks to you….

You, who take the time to read and review

By your very presence reading these lines,

You’ve distinguished yourself to me most fine

This site is built on reciprocation

I read your poems, and leave comments or approbations

 

So many a friend with poems just written

Request reads, but does not bother submitting

Comments of praise or encouragement to others;

They allow their silence to fill and to falter

 

So, out of an abundance of Appreciation

I have decided to recognize your participation.

For, I value your time and comments most honored

It lights up my day and sharpens my candor

 

This writing is honest and direct from my heart

It is not to be mistaken for satire, sarcasm, or tart

I truly do appreciate you

For all the times you’ve read and reviewed.

 

Please know that I have made an honest effort

To read through your writing, with comments left for

Praise and thanksgiving for writing with flair

Poetry, prose, or short story fair.

 

I have tried to comment and add my thoughts

To help you fix simple syntax and naught

I’ve tried to be helpful, respectful, and bright

To help guide your writing this salient night.

 

 

Thank you, dear friends.

 

Always,

Bright Ocean Star

March 31, 2015

 

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

how wonderful to read your gratitude .. i absolutely applaud you and reflect your sentiments myself .. this has been a wonderful place for me as well .. i am challenged and encouraged and gratified by all who take time to read and comment .. so God bless you Bright one .. i appreciate you!! ;)
E.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Awwee, Mr. Einstein. I appreciate you, as well. I am always overjoyed to see you and the others leave comments and helpful corrections. Its true that often it takes another set of eyes to see something that we miss, due only to the fact that we are too close to see it ourselves. Thank you for stopping in, my friend....:)

[Einstein Noodle]

happens to me all the time .. ;)

[Healing Star]

Yes, you have captured the feelings of my Heart, within your Heart, within this piece.
Thank you, oh, it lightens my day, has brought me to tears, the hear what others feel when reading my work, and it is their energy that I draw upon. I wrote a poem called Your Journey Too, about those who read us are on the same journey we are on, we feed each other. Thank you for writing this, that you for caring, thank you for sharing. We are on the same Journey Bright Ocean Star, oh how lucky we are, to be shown that we are more than they said we were, that we too are shining Stars, with a message for all the Hearts, as our new journey we begin to Embark. Keep writing my Bright Ocean Star and always remember how very lucky we all are.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Healing Star, you seem to be a kndred spirit. I am overjoyed that you found my poem and left this beautiful comment. You are right; we are all on this journey together, hand in hand. God bless you for leaving me this inspired review to think about. :)

[Healing Star]

The Joy is mutual, it is always a pleasure to find others that share our hearts. Keep sharing your heart, it is needed to bring us all along.

[BougaTimeBongo]

I like the sentiment, and I love that the poem is self aware and breaks the fourth wall, acknowledging the reader as the reader while the reader is reading...I think you would convey this even better if you let go of the rhyming structure and let the language take over. Many of the rhymes just feel a little bit too easy, or forced. Example, "By your very presence reading these lines, You’ve distinguished yourself to me most fine" feels too easy. I think you could convey the value of your reader in a much richer way, with or without rhyme. As far as forced rhymes, I mean lines such as "For, I value your time and comments most honored It lights up my day and sharpens my candor" where the rhyme isn't really a rhyme that matches, it just shares a similar sound, but the syllables themselves don't match up. Let go of restraints, delve into a thesaurus and when you want to say that someone is fine, say that they are admirable, lovely, astute, canny, nimble, etc. Get deep into your words now that you have the story, the theme of it all.

I hope that this was helpful and please know, I do think you have a great foundation, I just think you can work even harder to expand on it and build up something magnificent!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Molly. I appreciate your advice. I will work on it some more. It is still a rough draft. Thank you so much for dropping in to read and leave these inspired comments. I do appreciate it...:)

[~]

A heart of gold that wants to bless and softly rebuke. There's sincerity throughout the piece. Very many true thank you's.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you again, Moonskittles. I'm always happy to see you here. Your poetry is exceptional. This one is still pretty rough, but I love getting great feedback. Thank you again...:)

[~]

you are welcome, and I will keep coming back to read more :)

[s y e]

You're the sweetest and bestest. I loved this piece, an enjoyable and beautiful piece to come back to after being away from here... Thank YOU for everything you do.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are welcome. My favorite sweet online friend. I am soooo happy you've decided to try us out again. I love you.

[s y e]

All thanks to you, you persuaded me.
I love you too.

[Fran Marie]

I don't do requests ..sending or accepting..I used to and it was just to overwhelming..I try to review as time will allow...I like this write Its honesty and sincerity shines through..I always enjoy most of what I read on this site..there are so many great writers ..we all can help and learn from one another ..still like this site better than others I have tried..

[Bright Ocean Star]

I agree with you, Fran. I do like this site much more than others I've seen, but I haven't tried any others. I know what you mean about the read requests getting overwhelming. It just struck me today that I've befriended someone who floods the read request list with a litany of poems, and I try to read as many as I can, but he never comments on any of mine. So, I decided to write this poem. I'm glad you stopped and commented. It makes me happy to see your perspective. Thank you.:)

[Fran Marie]

Awhh, you're welcome, Anne, and yes, that's exactly why I stopped rr's..I will find on my own choice to whom I will review..it may take me some time..but eventually I get to it...

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

This made me laugh good read - ATC

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Ally. I appreciate you dropping in to read this one. :)

[NoelHC]

Well stated.
I try to get to every request that is sent to me, and usually make a comment about how the work made me feel, or something it evoked in me. I also try point out suggestions that might improve grammar or spelling. I appreciate getting similar feedback on my own writing. It is how we help each other grow.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Absolutely, Noel. It is how we help one another and form friendships. Thank you for commenting...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Thoughtful as always. Yes, this place should be about sharing ideas and community, not always asking and never giving, or insulting because it's fun. Thank you.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are welcome. You have been most kind to read anything and everything I write and leave such kind reviews or constructive comments. I do apprecieate it. :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

KLG, what about these two lines. I've got a question about the second line.
So many a friend with poems just written
Request reads, but does not bother submitting"
Should it be does or do. I've tried it both ways and I think it sounds better as does. However, for some reason it continues to bother me. What do you think?

[Matching Socks]

Thank you for writing this and you are welcome. :)
A community supports one another and that's what we are here.
It's a pleasure to read you and so many other talented writers here, we can all learn from one another.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are welcome, dear Ana. It is true. However, it is important to give thanks now and again, so I don't fall in the habit of taking my friends for granted. This place would not have the same appeal of more of us were takers, and less of us were givers. It is a pleasure to read your words. I love reading your poetry and thoughts, as well as many others. :)

[Matching Socks]

You're one of the good ones!. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate what you have written here...those who really appreciate others taking their time to read will reciprocate and appreciate...
and reading others will most definitely help our own writing...

jacob

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you again, Jacob. :)