My Girl

Inspired by her piercing eyes

My Hungry Girl

 

Silver hairs stand liquid black

Eyes alert and no way slack

Ears straight up and twitch with sound

Head alert, nerves unbound

Muscles tense, crouched, and ready

She smells the chicken cooking steady

Scents waft down to her place

Lying patient in corner’s trace

Begging pretty in her spot

She knows momma’s cooking pot

 

Coiled limbs and tail a wagging

No extra flesh falls a sagging

Purest muscle, lean, and toned

No sign of her sneaking bone

Swift of foot and fleet of stair

She launches herself into the air

 

Fast and low, she runs with power

Patrols the yard and tackles showers

Strangers fear her mighty gait

Head stands still, her back straight

Enter at your own risk, should you dare

She takes no prisoners, so beware….

 

Bright Ocean Star; February 26, 2015

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

just procrastinating again...

Reviews

[KWP]

ahhh for any dog lover you have written the most beautiful ode - I have a white and godlen brown cockerspaniel named Dodger and with every description I saw him excitedly jumping around beside me .. this is a lovely warm happy smiley piece the rhythm is smooth and easily read ... Thank you for your procrastination :) XX

[Bright Ocean Star]

You are welcome. If only I could procrastinate every day...Ha! I am ever so thankful you found this one and stopped in to leave this wonderful note. Thank you again! So happy you enjoyed it..:)

[....................]

A wonderful ode to a beloved companion. If this is what happens when you procrastinate then you should procrastinate more often. A wonderful write!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, FT. Unfortunately, procrastination causes problems down the assembly line of my responsibilities, and I can't afford this luxury very often. I deeply appreciate your time reading this piece and leaving such a nice review...:)

[Moonie]

Haha, an ode to your girl. Very interesting....:) Perfect rhymes as always, and the rhythm is top notch. Although, I think you could change the second "alert" in the first paragraph to "aware" or "wary" maybe.

The descriptions are excellent. You couldn't have described her in a better way. I can easily visualze her. Sounds like a great dog! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, fair daughter. She is great. Thank you for stopping by to read this one and leave such a nice review...:)

[Woody]

what a perfect description in rhyme! she sounds like a great body guard. I want one like that.
excellent one Star.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Woody. She's a powerful little love bug. I'm happy you found this one...:)

[Einstein Noodle]

she's a keeper for sure .. change the color to fawn and add a bucket of sticky drool and you have our Bella Mia ;)

and yes those eyes .. more imploringly pathetic than a beggar at Walmart :) i suppose she got a good dose of chicken soup that day right!?
E.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Always. I can't deny her when she waits so patiently...:)

[Einstein Noodle]

love you and your Girl!!! .. do be well ... :}

[MomzillaNC]

I had a cat once, named "Colby." One of my neighbors (a lady from Korea) asked if he was baby panther. :D Everyone called him my guard cat and no one got past him without inspection. He'd prowl around their ankles growling low until I welcomed them in.

[Bright Ocean Star]

And does't that give you such a warm feeling inside knowing that your precious cat would die for you? I had a miniature schnauzer like that. I took him everywhere....:) Thank you for stopping in to read this one, MommaZ! :)

[MomzillaNC]

He was a great cat! You're welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

"Begging pretty in her spot
She knows momma’s cooking pot

Coiled limbs and tail a wagging
No extra flesh falls a sagging
Purest muscle, lean, and toned
No sign of her sneaking bone
Swift of foot and fleet of stair
She launches herself into the air"

Excellent descriptions about her and the relationship to the wonderful mom and her delicious cooking and other chores. May she be always blessed by all...Excellent...:)..................

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Sami... I'm happy you stopped by to read this one. Be blessed. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)......................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

would like to meet this dog...
proud, protective and strong.

i like your procrastination...

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you,Jacob....:)