Spirits Visiting in the Night?

Can this be real?

Spirits Long Dead Visit in the Night?

 

Creaking doors swinging agape

For no sighted reason can I mistake

Cool shivers of nothing drip down my spine

I am left to wonder…Is it all in my mind?

 

Dreams of your long -dead mother lying with me in bed

Punching, kicking, elbows flying, pummel me instead

Until, alas, I give in, my feet hit the floor

I don’t want to live with her anymore….

It’s half past four!

 

I freely gave my consent to allow her residence

Under our roof in her last years of incontinence

Her mind slowly reducing to that of a child

No longer the recalcitrant, competitive guile

She hoodwinked the men; they thought her so sweet

Out of sight of males, she was like concrete

Stone cold and immovable, ready to treat

Any woman she felt competition to beat

Even me, the daughter in law, who was to be

Her nurse, companion, cook, faithfully

In honor of my man, the son of this woman

Who raised him despite her links to the coven.

 

He thinks me ridiculous, with my spiritual side

My belief in God, The Son, and Ghosts do collide

He is a scientist, demanding cold hard proof

He pooh-poohs my sixth-sense and my bad dreams to boot!

 

Night before last, I was awoken with a start

By the low sound of sirens and the voice from a far

Informing us there was a fire in the house

We must all get out!

I stumbled out from my bed, half awake, and confused

To find the rest of the house was fine

Asleep totally dis-abused.

My husband informs me, the vents near my bed

Are in desperate need of cleaning, and are whistling instead.

 

In cleaning the room, we replaced the air vent

We dusted the shelves, straightened the clothes and vacuumed the rest

What did I find in the closet tucked away in the back?

The cremated remains of my long dead mother in law, my jaw went slack….

 

He thinks I’m being ridiculous, hysterical, unreal…

Now, I ask you, Is it all in my mind?

Or do I have reason to feel

Her spirit still with us, unkind....

 

 

Bright Ocean Star, 2014

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Ok, I know this one is a bit creepy, but is the poem any good?

Reviews

[Michael G. Smith]

Bitter past the end. The line "Link to her Coven" made me laugh. If I were in your shoes I wouldn't be too happy to have mommy hanging around. I'm a knower of Christ and it really burns my biscuits when a scientist need hard proof? All science is based on theorems and theory, basically guesses. How is any better than faith? Oh well.

[Bright Ocean Star]

MIchael, faith is a gift. One, he apparently, hasn't yet been granted access to. I keep praying for him, but it takes time. I'm glad you liked it, otherwise.. Be blessed, my friend.

[wordman]

this would be a typical night down south where I live

[Bright Ocean Star]

Wordman, that's funny...:) Thank you for stopping by...:)

[willweb]

This was creepy, but very good. I really enjoyed the pictures this brought to my mind today. I was sorry it ended so soon.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Will, thank you so much! I can never tell if a poem is any good by myself. It is so nice to have you all have a chance to read it and review it for me, and you left such a kind review...:) Thank you again.

[WhereItResides]

Really liked this poem. It flowed so well, except in one small spot. "He pooh-poohs.."just made me laugh and kind of ruined the flow in that spot for me. I read it three times and couldn't get it to flow right. Beyond that little spot, it seemed to flow beautifully. Very good vocabulary use and the descriptions kept me interested the entire time in the story. I just really liked this poem.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you for your thoughtful review. I deeply appreciate that you stopped in to read this one, and I'm very happy you liked it. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

First off, the poem is a great story, and as far as I can see, well done. Now, as to the urn. The remains deserve a final resting place, whether your husband is religious or not.

[Bright Ocean Star]

I couldn't agree with you more. The problem is her final wishes were that we should toss them at a specific beach in South Carolina, but the last time we were on the east coast, he forgot the urn. He claims we will disperse them in September, when we have to go back to South Carolina for my son's graduation. I'm not happy...:(

[Frieda P]

Haunting read Star!! Shivers and this one smacks you upside the head, one never knows....stranger things have happened, excellent!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Frieda! I'm always happy to see you read my stuff. Thank you for stopping by! :)

[Frieda P]

Was my pleasure, I really enjoyed the read :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Oh, yes!! I do love my dark writes and this was very clever and creepy and just.... awesome! I could feel the shivers running up and down my spine while reading this. Fantastic job! :D

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Maddy! I'm so happy you liked this one. I can never seem to tell if they are any good until you guys get a crack at reading them...thank you again, my friend....:)

[Ayushi]

Great write.
I got scared and confused just like you :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you for stopping in for a nice read and review. I'm happy to see you here...:)

[Moonie]

Wow, creepy it definitely is, but also absolutely stunning. :))

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, fairest daughter of my moon....I am so pleased you liked it...Thank you so much for stopping by to read my poems. Be blessed.

[Moonie]

It is always a pleasure to read your writing.=)

[Ranger Kessel]

creepy is great. loved this and comic relief keeps things moving. thanks for sharing!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you for stopping in, Ranger. I'm glad you found the funny parts...:)