Sweet Melissa

musings of a swim mom....

Sweet Melissa….

 

Oh, most precious of jewels in a velvet box

Nestled softly amidst secure arms

Treasure beyond all known worth

In this world of economic birth

 

Your life is planned and scripted fair

Time is scheduled with great care

Academics first and foremost, Lass

Laps in the pool fulfill the last…

Evening hours come up all too fast….

 

No time for silly, willy girly haunts

With friends or boys or nasty taunts

Competition keeps you straight

Keeps the boys at good arms’ length

 

Training daily shields you, child

Dangers of drink and drugs most wild

 

For this is why you swim each day

This was my plan, I will say

Boys are unwelcome, unwanted even

Boys are trouble, Even Stephen

 

You work hard each and every day

Swimming, stroking, flipping, turning

Dropping time amid the burning

Of muscle strain and leg pain

azur springs and waves of blue

strokes are practiced until true

muscles toned, a conscious act

to perform your best, it is a fact

 

When you race, you fly lane center

Ripples form and waves surrender

Distance is your tour de force

Strength is wrought; endurance source

Center lane dominance is no trouble

Leaves them choking on your bubbles

 

Happy I am that you dwell with me

Happy I am that you swim so free

Happy I am that you swell with pride

Claim your ribbon and dance and slide….

Bright Ocean Star, May, 2014

 

Author's Note

I hope you like it!

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Oh, most precious of jewels in a velvet box

Nestled softly amidst secure arms

Treasure beyond all known worth

In this world of economic birth



Your life is planned and scripted fair

Time is scheduled with great care

Academics first and foremost, Lass

Laps in the pool fulfill the last…

Evening hours come up all too fast….



So beautiful makes me think of my school days :)

It was God Studies family friends never trusted boys they
were chasing after me I wanted nothing to do with them
I was and am a good girl and was a virgin and I wasn't giving that away.


And I simply love swimming I did it as
P.E. class for a long time in high school
in Iowa and I was his best student but if
I did Olympic Swimming races not sure my
family would get me there on time :(


I wanted to do Olympic track running
for a long time and I could do Track I was
good just never signed up as I was so busy
with my own family and schooling.

Such a beautiful piece thank you for sharing
and for your kind review and comments left on my
page.


Blessings. Benita

[Bright Ocean Star]

Oh, dear Kindred Spirit, I'm so happy you liked this one. This one was a gift from God....it just poured out of me one day, and I didn't have to think about it at all. My daughter is my inspiration for many of my poems, and I am blessed to have been given the chance to raise her and love her. She's better than me in so many respects, but I am just blessed to have her in my life. I am so happy you found this one. Thank you for stopping in to read this one, and leaving such kind review. Be blessed, my friend.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Would of never guessed you had a daughter Sports and poetry has always been my strong point poetry mom Sports Dad and Grandpa :) I see grandpa my fathers dad playing baseball he had that tall frame for the sport and my son has it too reminds me of him in some ways. well that does happen when we have children my son is better at things when it comes to cars LOL... :) but when he knows he can teach me and I teach him :) that is what a parent is all about we learn from each other we learn from our child and they learn from us. You're welcome. it was such a beautiful read she sounds like such a sweet and lovely Talented young woman. Blessings. Benita

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Benita. You are too sweet! Hugs! Anne

[FlamingPhoenix]

I LOVE this--having been a swimmer myself--I never ventured too far past a novice competitor, but both my siblings were swimmers too--and as a "wild" older sister, I was pleased in their productive pursuits! Excellent write--beautiful penning by an obviously devoted and talented mother!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Phoenix. I am so pleased you like it. It is a huge part of our life, and it has shaped who she is. I'm very, very thankful we found this talent and pursued it, for honestly, I think she's part dolphin. Thank you for stopping by and reading my pieces.

[Woody]

tenderness galore! love and pride shine throught he whole poem. a delightful read.
question, though: do you intend to shield her from the boys for ever? what about poor Stephen?

[Bright Ocean Star]

She's not allowed to date until she graduates from medical school...that should put her somewhere in the age bracket of 30 perhaps? (just kidding)

[A. Amos]

Great write and interesting concept...

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Amos. This is the only way to raise daughters in this dangerous, disturbing world full of drugs, sex, and violence. I need to keep her busy and her mind occupied for us both to survive high school....but she absolutely loves it. I don't push her; she is almost completely self driven. Thank you for stopping by to read my words. God bless you.

[A. Amos]

she has a mother like you and trust me she will make you proud, daughters are shadows of their mothers and you are full of wisdom...you're most welcome

[Bright Ocean Star]

That's the most beautiful thing anyone has ever said to me. Thank you, Amos. I am honored by your beautiful words. God bless you.

[A. Amos]

I just want you to know your special and be cool about everything all will be good

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Amos...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is actually a very deep piece. It beams with pride, and also self awareness and a little angst over how hard it is strike that balance between wanting a child to succeed but worrying they are being pushed too hard ... a nice write.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, KLG. I really don't push her. She loves swimming and training. I just want to keep her busy so she stays out of trouble and has her mind on something besides the boy who sits next to her in class...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

I didn't mean to suggest that, only the poem gives that feeling of wanting to keep that balance.

[Bright Ocean Star]

I'm happy you picked that up...there has to be a balance (moderation) in all things, but you are right...as a mother, I'd love nothing better than to have her completely forget about boys and everything else...but that isn't really realistic, so I have to give a little here and there to keep her happy. Boy, raising children in this world isn't easy...My thanks to you more than I can say...I value your reviews most highly. God bless you, KLG...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

We want to keep them....always safe...always so close. Mine is now an adult and still I want to pull her back. It was very hard to let her go her own path. I had hoped she would make all the right choices...then she told me .....Mom, I have to make mistakes or how will I ever learn....I 'll stumble ...but I promise. I 'll get back up! Beautiful poem!

[Bright Ocean Star]

thank you, Lost Girl. She is going to make mistakes. But the longer I can keep her occupied, I'm hoping those mistakes won't happen until she's a full grown adult and out of my house....:)

[Bright Ocean Star]

How did you let her go? I never thought I was a control freak until just recently. I may have to check myself into rehab just to be able to let her go. Do they allow people in rehab for being overprotective parents? I'm not liking this at all.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

It was not easy but I realized that if i tried to make her stay I would lose her.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she sounds like a really great kid, one to make a parent so proud...

i'd like to see her have a little fun though...she can still be dedicated but balanced.

but then...Olympics in the future? it happens this way.

[Bright Ocean Star]

We've had to give a little on the fun and allow her some time to have it. I don't want her rebelling...but if it were all my decision, this would be her life. Takes all my worry away...:)

[Deuces]

Quite a tribute from a proud and dedicated parent. An avid swimmer myself, I truly enjoyed this. I also enjoyed this as a parent. I just taught my daughter how to swim, so this resonated with me a lot. Truly a heartfelt piece with a unique topic. Great write.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, G. I'm very happy you liked it. I am not sure where it came from. I didn't have a clue I was even going to write a poem. It just came spilling out without any revision....so I'm really happy you like it. I hope your daughter enjoys swimming as much as Melissa does. It is such a great sport. Thanks again for reading my pieces...God bless you.