Sweet Melissa

musings of a swim mom....

Sweet Melissa….

 

Oh, most precious of jewels in a velvet box

Nestled softly amidst secure arms

Treasure beyond all known worth

In this world of economic birth

 

Your life is planned and scripted fair

Time is scheduled with great care

Academics first and foremost, Lass

Laps in the pool fulfill the last…

Evening hours come up all too fast….

 

No time for silly, willy girly haunts

With friends or boys or nasty taunts

Competition keeps you straight

Keeps the boys at good arms’ length

 

Training daily shields you, child

Dangers of drink and drugs most wild

 

For this is why you swim each day

This was my plan, I will say

Boys are unwelcome, unwanted even

Boys are trouble, Even Stephen

 

You work hard each and every day

Swimming, stroking, flipping, turning

Dropping time amid the burning

Of muscle strain and leg pain

azur springs and waves of blue

strokes are practiced until true

muscles toned, a conscious act

to perform your best, it is a fact

 

When you race, you fly lane center

Ripples form and waves surrender

Distance is your tour de force

Strength is wrought; endurance source

Center lane dominance is no trouble

Leaves them choking on your bubbles

 

Happy I am that you dwell with me

Happy I am that you swim so free

Happy I am that you swell with pride

Claim your ribbon and dance and slide….

Bright Ocean Star, May, 2014

 

Author's Note

I hope you like it!

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Oh, most precious of jewels in a velvet box

Nestled softly amidst secure arms

Treasure beyond all known worth

In this world of economic birth



Your life is planned and scripted fair

Time is scheduled with great care

Academics first and foremost, Lass

Laps in the pool fulfill the last…

Evening hours come up all too fast….



So beautiful makes me think of my school days :)

It was God Studies family friends never trusted boys they
were chasing after me I wanted nothing to do with them
I was and am a good girl and was a virgin and I wasn't giving that away.


And I simply love swimming I did it as
P.E. class for a long time in high school
in Iowa and I was his best student but if
I did Olympic Swimming races not sure my
family would get me there on time :(


I wanted to do Olympic track running
for a long time and I could do Track I was
good just never signed up as I was so busy
with my own family and schooling.

Such a beautiful piece thank you for sharing
and for your kind review and comments left on my
page.


Blessings. Benita

[Bright Ocean Star]

Oh, dear Kindred Spirit, I'm so happy you liked this one. This one was a gift from God....it just poured out of me one day, and I didn't have to think about it at all. My daughter is my inspiration for many of my poems, and I am blessed to have been given the chance to raise her and love her. She's better than me in so many respects, but I am just blessed to have her in my life. I am so happy you found this one. Thank you for stopping in to read this one, and leaving such kind review. Be blessed, my friend.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Would of never guessed you had a daughter Sports and poetry has always been my strong point poetry mom Sports Dad and Grandpa :) I see grandpa my fathers dad playing baseball he had that tall frame for the sport and my son has it too reminds me of him in some ways. well that does happen when we have children my son is better at things when it comes to cars LOL... :) but when he knows he can teach me and I teach him :) that is what a parent is all about we learn from each other we learn from our child and they learn from us. You're welcome. it was such a beautiful read she sounds like such a sweet and lovely Talented young woman. Blessings. Benita

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Benita. You are too sweet! Hugs! Anne

[Rose Kite]

'Golden locks with muscles tanned.
Your mom’s indeed your favorite fan!'
I’m sure, Bright Ocean Star, your words bless not just your family but all with whom you share such a beautiful glimpse of a loving mother’s heart!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you for your sweet comments, dear Rose Kite. It is nice to see you here. Be blessed, my friend.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Ah, what a sweet and beautiful write about your lovely daughter. Truly a wonderful read that shows how much you love your precious one. They are such gifts and our pride and joy...Fantastic work as usual, Anne. :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

thank you, Kalypso....:) As always, your comments are warmly appreciated. Thanks for stopping in for a read and a wonderful review....:)

[Rossen]

Lovely proud and bubbly... keepsake ...musical memories

Smooth job of it 100/100


Rossen

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, kind sir! It's nice to hear from you again...:)

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

Your life is planned and scripted fair

Time is scheduled with great care

Academics first and foremost, Lass

Laps in the pool fulfill the last…

Evening hours come up all too fast…... i am drowning into this stanza ohhh sweet mellisa...beautifuly written

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you for your supportive comments, SXG...I'm so glad you took time to stop by and read my piece. God bless you.

[Relic]

Swimming is a great way to shield her from those drugs and drinking. Children do have a mind of their own and sometimes when they get older they veer off the right track. It can't be stopped (if) they are influenced enough by others.

However, with your guidance and wisdom, I'm sure she'll continue to be a winner in life. I wish you both nothing but the best.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Tim. I'm just glad I have only one daughter. If she didn't have swimming to keep her focused, I don't know what she'd be doing right now. Thank you for taking the time to read my pieces. I appreciate your reviews. :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Well written ode to Melissa. I enjoy poetry such as this where the rhyme does not feel forced.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Michael. I am so happy for your review. Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to read my poetry. :)

[MusicandWritingFan]

I like it, it's great:) a clear description on how it life is for us, when we have to work hard everyday to make our dreams come true.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, MWF, it's very true. Success takes a lot of hard work and dedication. Thank you for stopping by...:)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Like it...like it?! I LOVE it!!

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Brittany. That makes me very happy. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Chris Micha]

Heart poured from a pen, that I was lucky enough to read. You have penned a heartfelt, emotional piece! Being a father, I wish I could freeze time and keep my son just the way he is. Really fantastic ma'am! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Thank you, Christian. I am so happy you stopped by to read and leave a great review. :)

[Chris Micha]

My pleasure!