Scared To Fly

Beating myself up

These intentional steps
That I deftly feign
Destruct all my conquests
My deep seeded blame
Old feet stricken with frost
A lackadaisical clue
No motion nor movement
Deep roots overnight grew
Soft daylight that whispers
A fresh day that has come
Pale skin in the twilight
Afraid of the sun
But gold shines in the distance
Watchful, curious eyes
And as travelers wander
I stay glued to the skies

Reviews

[Celie Rose]

I really enjoyed reading your poem. At times we all need to step back for a while and reflect. Sometimes it is necessary to take inventory on ourselves to find out what steps we need to take." But gold shines in the distance Watchful, curious eyes And as travelers wander I stay glued to the skies." Your poem is nicely written and expressed. Keep up the good work.

[Lost, n'MT]

I noticed the first poem I read was in 2014, and I am happy to see 2016 at the bottom of this piece because it means you're still writing and what I'm reading is still as great as can be. I say from a writing style and perspective, but you're still able to capture the emotions you're feeling as well as your earlier pieces. I wouldn't go as far to say that this is your best, but I would definitely say it's pretty damn close which leaves me more excited for what's to come. Actually, now that I re-read this again, I think this could be your most complete poem in regards to being as consistently strong from beginning to middle to end yet a couple of others have reached peaks so high that I would probably put this in your top 3 even though it's all subjective, can change by the day, and you really can't truly accurately judge, rate, or even review poetry any higher than the measurement of whether it truly moves you or not. This like just about all of the poems that I've read has truly moved me, and this is one of the best written in my opinion which is saying a lot. You're still at the top of your game from what I've read on here, and it's so inspiring how you've turned what I imagine to be some very negative energy into masterful works of art. Even though it wouldn't take away or change anything from your writings whatsoever IMO, I would be thrilled to see your book of poems get published and help touch others who can truly appreciate it. I hope you don't let anything detract you from your poems, and I hope you're in a much better mindset even though I still feel your pain in later writings. Thank you for continuing to share.

[LapseOfMind]

I did indeed take a break from writing for a while. I was in a transformational state that shaped me to who I am now. Though some of poetry, like this one for example, isn't dark like the others, it does speak of my need to overcome myself. This one does make me feel like I actually fully completed a poem, which, most of the time I feel I never truly end them. It does feel good to be writing again and I hope that I can still express myself like I used to. Thank you again for reading and reviewing, I appreciate the time you're taking.

[Lost, n'MT]

Well you certainty came out on the better of end of it, at least from a writing perspective. I hope you did from an emotional standpoint, and I hope that you're in better spirits and in a much better mindset after going through your transitional state.

I can somewhat understand why you'd feel some of your poems might feel as if they're not fully completed, but I think that is also what adds to the brilliance of your work. From expressing so much in so few words at times, yet leaving this reader in particular wondering and wanting more after having experienced so much so quickly. A lot of these just hit me so fast that I'm left satisfied, impressed, and desiring more while admiring how you put it all together to clearly and simplistically complex if that makes any sense besides being an oxymoron. You just turn pain and complexity into simplicity with out losing any of the emotion and keeping it so natural, at least from my perspective. I realize how difficult that can be, from both an emotional standpoint and from a writing standpoints as well. I am glad that you're satisfied with them one though, it's another a great piece.

That's great you feel good writing again, and I hope you're able to continue to express yourself. I wouldn't worry so much about expressing yourself like you used to because both your writings and yourself will continue to change and evolve for better and for worse, and being able to express yourself as needed is what's more important above us. Turning it into a wonderfully written piece is just an added bonus for the readers to enjoy.

You're welcome, I felt the need to share because just how much I was moved by your writings. I also felt you should be aware of how talented you are (at least from my humble opinion), but I think those who appreciate good poetry and have the ability to feel deeply will truly enjoy, respect, and appreciate your writings.

[Ana]

This seems like a poem we'd read in school (that's a compliment). I'm not a poetry person but the last few lines caught my attention! I could definitely see us analyzing this in class (again, not an insult). I love that last line so much, but I don't know why. It's really expressive for one sentence

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, thank you very much! I really appreciate it! I'm glad that you enjoyed it and it was reading and analyzing stuff in school that helped me to become interested in writing

[BL]

There are some great individual lines in this that are well balanced offering good flow. You have reflected your uncertainty well and it gave me as a reader the feeling of positive and negative, like a bird first taking flight.

[LapseOfMind]

Then I have done my job, thank you very much!

[Ashley Renegade]

I was able to see it all as I read. Beautiful work friend! I got the feeling that even though a new day is given it doesn't mean you trust it's beauty.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much! Yeah it's a reflection on my trepidation of a new beginning. A new dream, a new goal and my nervousness to proceed

[Ashley Renegade]

You did an awesome job articulating that.

[LapseOfMind]

Thanks, I appreciate that :)

[Rod]

"Pale skin in the twilight ", I love this :)

[LapseOfMind]

Awesome, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment

[J.A]

Amazing. You have a little bit of Lord Byron in your work. I love how the images of being stuck. Wether his feet is "stricken with frost" or his eyes are "glued" to the sky. Nice piece.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, i really appreciate it! I guess now I'm going to have to read up on Lord Byron

[J3ssInJupit3r]

My favorite line in this was "soft daylight that whispers" I imagined a huge field of wild flowers and just looking up at the sky through misty trees. You truly are poetic when you write. This was yet another beautiful piece done by a beautiful mind. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[LapseOfMind]

I really appreciate that! I'm glad that you enjoyed this piece, surprisingly enough I actually kind of like it too lol the other a day a family member got on here and read my work and told me I just need to face the fact that I'm a poet. I'll probably fight that forever though lol

[J3ssInJupit3r]

You are a poet. Even if you don't know it. Your soul radiates extreme light. And your words translate your struggle, your fight. I will always consider you a poet in my eyes because every time I read something of yours, I get those "wow" goosebumps and I am blown away. You know you are an incredible artist if your work affects the viewers.

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, if I still had an ego, you would've just blown it up bigger lol thank you very much, I really do appreciate what you've said

[Tiffany K Charles]

This is a wonderful poem..... I was a flight attendant .... so I truly get this poem..... I know so many people who are scared to fly.... I shall have them check out this poem.....

[LapseOfMind]

Lol thank you very much but I didn't mean 'scared to fly' in the literal sense

[Anna]

This is wonderful, and I can definitely relate. You portray emotions quite well. Keep it up! :)

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much 🤓