A Page

A page I opened up to in one of my journals. Sunday, May 17th, 2015. I'll try and lay it out as I did in the book

No symbol. Free as smoke in
the breeze.
To Blink is
to fly.


Reaching Out To Embrace
What Heaven May Come.
I can see it now, how this will go. A battlefield
family. Stormy coastline Decay. And how
will I climb, dashed upon the rocks. Am I
selfish, wanting peace and serenity? Standing
in the distance, I watch the demise.

Author's Note

Just a page of thoughts as I drifted off into space one day. I was depressed.

Reviews

[jesserose99]

love the movement of this poem, the sweet sadness, sweet because of the beginning, sad because of the end. often the case in life. the selfish ones are the ones who want destruction, and sadly there are so many of them. lovely work.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I kind of poured myself out with this. Luckily everything has changed since then. Too bad my writing isn't that great when I'm happy lol

[Coyote Poetry]

Not selfish. Just holding on to hope.
"Am I
selfish, wanting peace and serenity? Standing
in the distance, I watch the demise."
In the history of this world. People who stood for peace were outcast or murdered. A strong ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I really appreciate it!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Celie Rose]

When you are in a dark place, it is hard to grasp the light. "And how will I climb, dashed upon the rocks. Am I selfish, wanting peace and serenity? Standing in the distance, I watch the demise." Nice job writing. Keep up the good work.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much

[J3ssInJupit3r]

"Stormy Coastline Decay" I am not sure what drew me to this line, but I really liked it. It was chilling and the words just sounded good together. I liked this piece, another short, simple piece. Thank you for sharing.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate it!

[McBear]

We all have our days. I could see how this came from depression as your mind is constantly wandering away with no where to go. Very meaningful; lots of things come from this: I feeling of hopelessness or pain, and the longing to feel better. Just one little critique;

"And how
will I climb, dashed upon the rocks."

I think you need a question mark at the end because in these lines:

"Am I
selfish, wanting peace and serenity?"

You used a question mark. So, I think you need one on the other lines I showed.

Well done, friend :)

[LapseOfMind]

Lol yeah, I guess I should've used a question mark. Oh well lol thanks for reading and reviewing!

[Tiffany K Charles]

everyone has a day like this........ Classic. Very wonderfully put.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much :)

[Twenty Degrees]

This poem is amazing, something I can relate to really. It's strange how muddled up thoughts can turn into something beautiful. Thank you for sending in the request, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!