Tied Into Me

Words reflecting a feeling, brought about by a moment, an urgency of thought.

And as we stand
On the edge of it all
I see in your eyes
There's no going back
Outside from the inside
This moment of touch
All focus that's given
Is lacking in sin
Our skin that is melding
False sense of what's real
Fingernails that scrape
Fall black to give in

Reviews

[V]

Nicely written. There's again sensuality in it but I could also sense something like a negative connotation in your words maybe because of the line "is lacking in sin". I think there are hidden emotions weaved into it such as doubt hesitation insecurity or fear even maybe.
The last line though, reads a little awkward regarding your use of words.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate it. I mulled over the last line for a while and eventually gave up and left it as is. There is quite a bit going on in this one. Definitely doubt and a few other emotions and thoughts. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a review

[V]

You're welcome.

[Caddy]

I've been reading over a lot of your work and I am very much enjoying your style. Each line holds a lot of meaning and thought. This one is beautiful in its simplicity and depth.

[LapseOfMind]

Awesome, I'm glad that you enjoy what I've written. I appreciate you taking the time to go through my work!

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words.
"Our skin that is melding
False sense of what's real
Fingernails that scrape
Fall black to give in"
I liked the closing lines. Sometime we cannot stop the movement of life. White or black memories become okay with time. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review, I greatly appreciate it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[mysteriouslyyours]

Short but amazing. You provoke so many thoughts through just a dozen lines. I'm looking forward to reading more of your beautiful work!

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, thank you very much, I really do appreciate it! I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

[Celie Rose]

I feel the passion in this writing. "This moment of touch All focus that's given ." Good job. Keep writing.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much, I appreciate it

[SleeplessVolcano]

Touching poetry.....but I am puzzled by the last line....."fall black to give in". Can you explain what you mean?

[LapseOfMind]

The line is about all the things that hold us back, our doubts and insecurities, give up and go away as they give in. That we overcome them. I hope that makes sense

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

This reminds me of when you see someone and it is just like *bam* you are drawn to them with a passion.
I enjoyed this poem.
I loved the name of this poem.
amazing poem.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I am glad that you enjoyed it!

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

Welcome!!!!!!!!!

[McBear]

I read the words in a calm motion but they pulled you in like quicksand; the urgency was genius. Reminded of me of when you have a crush on someone and it just sucks you into them with a burning passion.

[LapseOfMind]

Wow, thank you very much! I really appreciate that

[Robert]

Really good free verse poem. I enjoyed reading this poem.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I appreciate it!