Reflection of Moments

Words depicting times. I won't say more than that.

I touched your skin, broken

and watched as you turned away

weren't we supposed to be Heaven?

my green eyes cast in matte grey

fingers tingle incisions

I'm lost in this maze

you pulled back your decisions 

I attacked your famed gaze

uttered words bearing pitchforks

countered curse i create

to you I am nothing

to me I'm a game

so quick is your gamble

let loose volleys of chains

I am but poisoned

I am your slave.

Author's Note

Just something I had to get out...

Reviews

[FateDictates]

your words keep me spellbound and wanting more as I try decipher this unique energy in your work, it's rather intoxicating, so CURTSY BOW THANK YOU for that!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

This is a wonderful release of emotions. You touch the hearts of many with your writing.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you Val, I really appreciate that!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the honest and direct words. Took the reader to place of education and left them with powerful ending.
"I am but poisoned
I am your slave."
Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you for reading and im glad you enjoyed it

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Emerald Seas]

There is a lot going on in this short poem. Very deep and heartfelt. I found myself reading it over a few times trying to find that common theme that seemed to unravel the relationship, but it is hidden within a well woven writing. It makes me stop and think - and that kind of writing I enjoy. Well done.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you. It would be hard to truly understand every line if you're not me, since this was written from my experience. The fact that you read it multiple times is flattering and gives me hope for my writing. Again, thank you

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

Wow! This right is so heartfelt, nicely penned

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Bittersweet, but surreal and intricate in the details.

I attacked your famed gaze
uttered words bearing pitchforks
countered curse I create -- loved these lines...so vivid and conceptual.

I find myself searching in this piece...looking for the thread that holds the whole thing together, and yet it is ellusive. I don't think that is a bad thing in this case, rather I think that is what makes this one so interesting. Creative and intuitive. Well done.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much. You would have to live through my mind to fully understand all the lines and how they connect. Nevertheless, thank you

[Jack...]

Very cool my friend and a bit sad. Nice write.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you. Sad yes but only a fleeting moment, a single instance, so its OK lol

[Imara]

I think you expressed these emotioins so well. You talk about the break up and how hurt you were from it but the poison is there and your "slavery" you dedication your love to him is still there. That is the poison. I loved this great job!

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you but who is this ”him” you spoke of? This piece is about a girl lol

[Imara]

I'm a girl so I took to to be from a girl talking about a guy (sorry force of habit) haha

[LapseOfMind]

Lol its ok

[Saumya]

really worth reading piece....!!!
enjoyed reading.....!!!!!
well done.... :)

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, i appreciate it

[Saumya]

most welcome..!!!
:)

[SteveB]

Ow! If the object of poetry is to transmit emotion through carefully chosen words then indeed you have created poetry.
Very well done.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much