Forever My Shame

A poem about something that bugs me

FOREVER MY SHAME

BY Nicholas Catron

Too many times, you declare and decree

Judgment is passed, my decisions not free

Condescend and descend to my level to speak

Show me my faults, it’s my fault that I’m weak

You don’t mean to demean but it’s all the same

I don’t live in my past but you show me my shame

Forgive, forget not your memories - my chains

I sacrifice in vain in the face of your claims

Author's Note

Just a poem. I don't pretend to be a poet.

Reviews

[Lost, n'MT]

The flow is tremendous, fantastic rhyme scheme, and you're very talented at capturing your emotions so deeply. An enjoyable and releatable piece, and excellently expressed so concisely and organically.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, I really appreciate it. It felt great writing this one.

[Lost, n'MT]

Pretty sure this was the second one I read, and the "turning point" where I realized I just couldn't stop and had to keep reading on.

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A deep and slightly dark poem.

Certainly it has the feel of a poem that has burst forth from the depths of your soul and threw itself on the page.
Well written, well rhymed, excellent meter with a very serious tone and theme.

Quite a good write. Nice work.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you very much i appreciate it. Yeah this pretty much wrote itself lol

[FateDictates]

felt like those words just spilled on out and once done..a weight off or even release, transporting me into character..well done..curtsy bow

[LapseOfMind]

Yes it felt great once I finished. A lot came out in those words. I'm glad you enjoyed it

[David Lewis Paget]

Well, if you're not a poet, I don't know who is. I love that final line - I sacrifice in vain in the face of your claims. You have a good grasp of both rhyme and metre, and internal rhyme. Kudo's.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, it just all came spilling out when I wrote it

[Izzy-01]

interesting combination of words . Show me my faults, it’s my fault that
I’m weak that was a powerful line ...gud stuff

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, i appreciate it

[Raven666]

I'm not going to pretend I'm an expert poem reviewer, but I really liked this poem and thought I should tell you. Great Job.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much

[Zap-the-awesome]

Interesting. Good work.

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you

[redflutterby]

The judgement and words of others often times damages us more then the acts we've committed. If you've come to terms with your past and changed as a person you shouldn't continue to pay for your mistakes. You've captured this well in your words. And you are a poet... ;-)

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you much. Writing this helped immensly at the time. Im glad so many like it

[redflutterby]

You're welcome!!

[Emerald Seas]

It is difficult to get past transgressions when they are brought back up by others and not left in the past where they belong. A thoughtful writing - and a well constructed rhyme. Poet - yes, you are...

[LapseOfMind]

Thank you, i appreciate it

[Angi]

From where I sit, you are a poet. These words resonate with me. I have been on both ends of this poem, to my regret. You made me feel something and that is the main criteria for me. Angi~

[LapseOfMind]

Well thank you, im glad that my words could produce at least some effect