Falling in circles

I feel defeated, Lost in my own mind,

spinning in circles and losing track of time.

I've fallen hard, and it's all your fault.

Thanks for letting my slip, thanks for letting me crash.

You wouldn't have caught me even if you thought you could...

Reviews

[Sexy P3nguin]

I really like this poem. It's short, and sweet. Although it is those two things, it has a lot of meaning, I believe. I don't see many grammar errors at all. The only thing I can pick out about it is, the last two lines don't rhyme. That kind of throws the reader off in my opinion. But that's just me. Keep up the good work! :D