The Strongest Force

The winds of the ocean

don't compare to my stride

not teaseing nor taunting

it's the peace of my pride

 

The arch of my back

the strength of my hips

the silk of my skin

the taste of my lips

 

the wave of my hair

the spark in my eyes

the way I am built

not matter what size

 

my smile is magical

brighter then any

a gril like me;

you won't find many

 

I make the strongest men

crawl down on their knees

over glass if nessecary

as long as I'm pleased

 

Deserts are thirsty

for my sweet embrace

the clouds up above me

is my favorite hiding place

 

In all the universe

I have the most power

anything in my way

I'm sure to devour

 

So come with me

on a kick-a*s whirl

what am I? Don't you know,

I'm a brown eyed girl.

Author's Note

I read a poem once about a phenominal woman, and it inspired me to write this.

Reviews

[Lucy Joan]

Amazing poem; smooth rhyming and great description, you really expressed the power of the narrrator in simple words. Well done.

[Jennifer Pennington]

Brilliant and remarkable!

[azlamalo]

love it

[Ishan Sadwelkar]

Narcissist, direct, verbal, rude, fanatic.
But
charming.

I liked it.
Rhythmic and real.

Abstract in a very unusual form.
The poem had only you written all over it !

[Paul Okeke]

nice

[Devons]

Yeah, this has a fair amount of Kick! to it. Though I didn't quite get the introductory verse, the rest of it makes plain sense and is like the modern-day 'shout-out', defying contradiction, employing affirmation and energy. Interesting. Especially since I'm a brown-eyed boy..!

[122009]

This has so much confidence in it.

I love it, good job!

[Alex W]

Very good, I like this :-D

You did miss out the 'K' on 'knees', thought i'd let you know.

But this is a class write, even if no-one can make me crawl on my knees haha ;-)

85/100

[zappy]

wow this is really nice i like it

[Mistaken]

Laney this is brilliant!!!! you'll have to tell me what poem it was haha :)

This was amazing just wow..it shows how every woman is beautiful and only the right person/man can see just how beatufil she is