Tangled in strings

A day has passed

a minute gone by

a few more seconds

and I will fly

 

my wings will unfold

my soul will unlock

my rythem will steady

like the tick of a clock

 

my heart will hammer

ready for flight

into the stars

and into the night

 

yet... I still stand

in this spot

something holds me

I am caught

 

unknown to me

the thing that has me on strings

all tangled up

in my beautiful wings.

Reviews

[Frantzuu]

The poem flows well, and the first stanza is powerful sets up the mood for the reader. Great job, I sure like your style :D

[TaylorTerror]

absolutly amazing elaine its beautiful(: yur amazing at this.

[LL2]

This is so beautiful! I love it. The last stanza is very reflective, and it's easy to relate to. It's also what makes the poem so amazing. That being said, I think the rhythm of it is a little uncomfortable, if that makes sense. All in all, it's amazing.