Suffering

Suffering

A Poem by Kayla
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Please don't get me wrong, I am very much TEAM EDWARD!!!!

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You are crawling in my skin,

Eating at my soul.

Wrenching out my heart,

And leaving me to bleed.

I gave you every bit of me,

And you tore me to pieces.

I lost my mind,

I cannot breathe.

Your unfaithfulness is killing.

Why did you have to go?

Why did you leave this burning hole?

I will forever feel insane,

Please take away the pain.

© 2009 Kayla


Author's Note

Kayla
Funny story because I was just writing, not even thinking. My cousin and I were talking about New Moon. And when I read this, it ended up sounding like Bella in New Moon XD

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This was good. But it didn't sound a lot like Bella, and you wrote it from Bella's perspective. "Your unfaithfulness is killing me." That was a bit off track. This poem would suit another scenario better. Not Bella. However, it was a good write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not concerned about Bella or anything dealing with the Twilight series, but I do like the poem. Angsty poetry can be cool at times.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think you captured Bella's pain precisely! I'm not gonna bag on Edward because he did go back to her, but I was shocked when I read the part where he left her. This is a really great poem!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great piece I love it. yes i was shocked when i was reading the 2nd book....I was like Holy SHhht. He left her! Wow... great tribute.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this, i think your best poem yet!
And yeah its funny we were talking about it and you said you just made a poem and wow it sounds just like bella haha

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Kayla
Kayla

Rochester, NY



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