Explosions In The Mind's Eye

All of the incredible feelings you feel about your significant other :)

 

Darling, if only you could see what I see

You would bear witness galaxies of stars and planets colliding upon sheer impact in a breathtaking collision when your eyes take hold of mine

My Love, You would behold the passionate spark of a thousand sunsets burning brightly over the horizon of my eyes when they are graced with your charming smile

You would remain in awe of the rays of sunlight that warmly blanket my porcelain skin as I experience the sensations of your touch

Your eyes would pierce the vision of shooting stars showering all around us as the shades of aurora borealis engulf us when your lips sincerely happen upon mine

Oh Darling, if only you could feel the intensity of your luring acts of captivation upon my heart

You would experience the waterfall of desire cascading down in symmetrical, rhythmic beating to match that of my anxious heart whenever you are near

You would conceive that the rarity of our admirable connection surpasses that of a dazzling four- leaf clover amongst a field of dreary green

My Dear, you would savor every moment of our love as if it were a precious flower, thriving and blooming from the roaring thunder and gentle breeze of our eternal affection

You would envision the elegance of blinding lightning shot down from the depths of the moon to dance balleticly across the sky when my hand is found in yours

You would foresee the rainbow formed by every drop of passion bestowed upon me from the chambers of your heart, raining melodically from your lips

My Darling, if only you knew

Author's Note

Reviews are always welcomed! But please don't tell me to shorten it. I can't. Hahah :)

Reviews

[William]

You have a strong vocabulary; I sense a certain ability to string pretty words together in a pleasing way which is utterly lacking in most of the writing I read these days. This is poetry. You've created a beautiful product--the ability to do so is something rare and lovely. Don't lose it.

[fireblossom]

Forget what this is about...it is wonderful writing. Descriptive, free flowing, colorful to the point of dazzling. Well done. A treat for this writers eyes and mind.

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you for this review, as well! I'm really glad you enjoy it.

[Ice Girl]

Nicely written!!!

[Alana McGuire]

Thank you!(:

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

This almost reminds me the song that I wrote, "I'm on the Moon," which is a love song that is being compared to space. And this a very good example how love could be compared to space, and to earth's elements and such. This is one of my favorite poems I actually read. Great job!

[R J Askew]

O that old love bug doesn't half get our inspirarion a-flowing. Of course you mustn't shorten it. You were having toooo much fun in the words as you were writing them. And why not? It's a sweet love poem. I esp like the penultimate verse.

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful.

[Ray]

Interesting and well written. Your vocabulary is good, and try to not repeat 'my darling' or 'my dear'--find something more creative to replace it, a flow of your own words ! I enjoyed reading it !

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

The way you wrap love with nature is unbelievable... I love this a lot, you captured this so so nicely. I just imagine you in love with someone special... because just from reading your writes, the love in you is so beautiful Alana.

I love the title of this, very nice.

I love this from beginning to end.

From the beginning with " galaxies of stars and planets" in this part
"You would bear witness galaxies of stars and planets colliding upon sheer impact in a breathtaking collision when your eyes take hold of mine"
to
"the rainbow formed by every drop of passion bestowed upon me from the chambers of your heart, raining melodically from your lips"
so nice... lovely and great ending.

I love this, the warmth in this is so nice, the descriptions of the "sensations of your touch":
" rays of sunlight that warmly blanket my porcelain skin as I experience the sensations of your touch"

Greatly done... love it all.

[Canicus]

I love this. it lets me imagine so many beautiful images, and then comparing them to the love of you and another is just amazing.

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Couldn't have said it better! If this is about what I think it is, I can definately relate to that!! Love the expression of the thoughts!! Great poem!