So Far Apart

I scream your name with a heart pounding screech.
You're so far away, but I know you can hear my speech.
My true feelings into words, to your heart and your lovely soul.
They reach out. Only receiving your spirit, I cry in this cold.
Alone and so far away, you leave me. Not meaning to, but doing so.
Tonight will be a lonely one without the treble and bass of your voice.
Filling every part of my body, terribly I seek your face. No choice.
Either way, you're there, not here, with me. Lord, soon, let this be.
I want the feel of her smooth skin rolling across my stomach.
I want the eyes of an angel, staring right back at me. My heart lit.
Keep this flame of connection alive. I want to be with you always.
See this flame rising only to die. Only to keep you with me someways.
Mentally, or for real. I will always need more of your sweet loving heart.
Loving you always, when you are here, and when we are so far apart.

Author's Note

not one of my better pieces. don't really know what i just wrote. was just missing her, and let my heart spill out into words upon this white canvas now full.

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"I cry in this cold.
Alone and so far away, you leave me. "- I loved this line a lot.

You know what; sometimes random work like this can bring the best out of us. I liked the way you have written it. The style is quite raw and it in increasing the flow and spontaneity of the entire writing.
Great work overall, very intriguing indeed!

[turtlegirlluver]

You show your emotions very well in this piece and show what it's like to not be with her. It's still a strong piece in it's own way.

"Loving you always, when you are here, and when we are so far apart."

Good job!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

A beartiful write. Good job

[~angelalala~]

"Alone and so far away, you leave me. Not meaning to, but doing so" i loved this line. i can relate. to love someone, so much that you feel empty, & desperately alone when they are not with you. it starts off with a despairing feel then ends up as a heart-filled love poem. i thought it was wonderful for 'not one of my better pieces' :) great work.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Huh... when I first read the first half of this, I thought you were talking about God. :/ Well, either way, I like it. ^^ Very deep; that's a given. Great work!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Jake Martin]

thats actually quite good.
of course, i love all your work. one question though. is this new or older? because i remember when you were showing me some older stuff that was great as well.

like i say it always: keep on writing!!!