Insane

I'm grown mad from my own loneliness.
Beaten to a disabled lover, I feel nothing.
Tired of my self. Tired of her. What is with this.
Speak louder I can't hear. Your words no longer cleansing.
God. Help me. True insanity comes from the mind.
Was this meant to be? My life left behind?
Cleanse me of this hatred I hold for others.
Fill those crevices with new love. Open these shutters.
Let the light in. Let me see your grace oh Lord.
My mind rips the layer of normality with a longsword.
Breaking through towards my own mental illness.
For thine is the power, help me refill this. Feel this.
No longer breathing, I fall to the dirt unconscious.
No longer caring, I rise to the lord, with nothing to miss.
Save me. Love me. Show me you're able to do these things.
I've torn myself apart. What more can this world bring?
With a savaged heart, I turn to nothing but dead ends.
Falling for these pleasures, which I soon depend.
I miss her. My arms bends to slowly extend.
Nothing to hold, and no where to begin.
Crying harder and harder, only to see my own my pain.
I wish you could see me now. I'm insane.

Reviews

[J.Black]

"I wish you could see me now. I'm insane." -- SO POWERFUL to end it! That's really good.

[David]

I agree with Jake Martin down there, definitely one of the better pieces of yours. "Cleanse me of this hatred I hold for others" is my favorite line. I can't say why exactly but it just stuck with me for some reason. The other line that i love is " I wish you could see me now. I'm insane." It wraps up the whole poem quite nicely. Overall, very good. Keep up the good work.
-dave-

[Jake Martin]

Wow this is definitely one of your better works. Not that any of them aren't good. :D
Love the way you write, but you already know that. This poem especially is very descriptive and interesting. Definitely keep writing!!!

[Hannah Olivia]

Haha you are INSANE ^^
... Ummm in the This Is Insanely Great kind of way X3
... But the other way too

Great job :3