One More Day

Why can’t this be a nightmare?

Why does it all have to be real?

I beg anybody to tell me this is all false,

But reality shows that my lover is deathly ill.

 

I guarantee that I will lose my mind

Upon the burden of my sweetheart’s death,

But I must maintain my sanity,

So I may comfort my darling to her last breath.

 

Everyday my intellect becomes weaker,

But I must hold on just one more day.  Another day.

As long as she’s still living,

I’m going to be okay.

 

My conscience slowly succumbs to insanity,

The struggle to stay sane only gets harder,

Craziness grows stronger over me

As the distance between you and your life becomes farther.

 

People come and restrain me, then try to drag me out,

The doctors scream that I’ve gone insane,

Their fingernails dig deep into my skin,

But I clutch onto you and ignore my pain.

 

Release me, leave me alone!

I haven’t gone insane yet, that isn’t true!

I shake their grasp off of me and turn to my lover,

How could I go crazy when I still have you?

Author's Note

I know this isn't my best poem, but regardless of that, I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[Rhea752]

it kept me wanting more. the poem was lovely and emotional. keep writing

[Alm]

I felt pretty bad for the narrator. It's hard to lose someone if you depend on them too much, which is kinda bad. I like how the narrator is determined to stay sane but does the complete opposite.
Some part of me thinks he just went totally crazy with his lover's death, and pretended to think she was still alive (for a bit at least, especially when he asked "How could I go crazy when I still have you?" He sounded pretty desperate, like, No, you aren't dead yet, I still need you! Or something like that).

The voice of the character is very prominent in this. I like that.

-Alm

[Southern Cross]

I like the way you explore the depths of your mind in your poetry..It always shows such intensity of such a deep soul

[melandra]

very vivid poetry i loved this one

[Leslie Marie]

A beautiful, emotional, and strong willed poem. I enjoyed it.

[Michael G.]

Good strong storyline. You held your reader right where you wanted them throughout.
Good work, Ryan.
And you say, "Not my best poem...."
Not your worst, either.

[Freckled Princess]

Brought me to tears. Emotional and well thought out, my friend.

[Owlgirl]

Wow, emotionally filled poem that grasps the reader and holds their attention until the very last word. Very well written and well spoken as well, the mentality of the lover left behind as the one they love passes away. Great job!