Drowning

I lost myself.

I want to drown,

To drown in an ocean of faces,

Be like them, do as they do,

Wear their mask that is emotionless.

 

I breathe in life hidden in those waters, adventuring it,

Storing away the secret of my drowned past with master stealth,

Spewing millions of lies with my lips,

Until I start to believe in my own lies myself.

 

There, I swam the sea of illusion,

With a life that is oh, so bland,

As I stare at the stranger in the mirror,

And begin to question who I am.

 

But then, that’s when the tsunamis return to take me back,

Backwards, my memory begins to bend,

The first river escapes my hollow eyes as the current pulls me away,

And the tears of my past stain my cheeks again.

Reviews

[Mia]

This is just amazing! Wow!
"The first river escapes my hollow eyes as the current pulls me away,
And the tears of my past stain my cheeks again."
You have a wonderful way of making your emotions come to life in this poem. Fantastic job!

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Loved it! The sea is calm and then it gets angry. Love those poems, when u express your feelings and emotions. 100/100

[Treble]

This is so beautiful! I feel your pain. Well expressed! There are times in my life where I just want to sink underneath my blanket and cry till I die of dehydration. The past can be really hard to let go of. But many people have told me that you find your old and true self if you believe, if you want to, and with time. So I believe you will find yourself again in time. Well expressed!

[Priscilla Sayers]

Beautiful sorrow, the emotion so bold and so brave to share with others. You have a piece of powerful words that flow into the depths of emotion. Keep releasing the poison that vexes you, there is a reason why we are the only creatures with the ability to shed tears. Tears release disease from your body, especially sorrow that threatens your peace of mind. Bravo fellow poet and thank you for your honest piece!

[Tree]

Tai your grasp of the metaphorical device presents a clear and present danger to anyone wishing not to visualize, or undertand. A stimulating visual write.

[Helen Crutchett]

Very profound and poignant poem.



"There, I swam the sea of illusion,
with a life that is oh, so bland,
As I stare at the stranger in the mirror,
And begin to question who I am."


The questioning of 'who you are' is the beginning of healing, trust me.

Good job!

[Tai Ryens]

Beginning of healing, or beginning of the fall?

[Helen Crutchett]

Its up to you. :)

[Marie]

Ths past is an ocean...sometimes drowning us...

[stars are far]

This amazing piece held so strong emotions between every lettrr..
Well done man

[EileenMarie]

Very powerful emotions here! Great flow!!
Nice job!

[Olesya L]

Vivid and mesmerizing. I love how you mixed nature and emotions together in a very fresh manner.