Drowning

I lost myself.

I want to drown,

To drown in an ocean of faces,

Be like them, do as they do,

Wear their mask that is emotionless.

 

I breathe in life hidden in those waters, adventuring it,

Storing away the secret of my drowned past with master stealth,

Spewing millions of lies with my lips,

Until I start to believe in my own lies myself.

 

There, I swam the sea of illusion,

With a life that is oh, so bland,

As I stare at the stranger in the mirror,

And begin to question who I am.

 

But then, that’s when the tsunamis return to take me back,

Backwards, my memory begins to bend,

The first river escapes my hollow eyes as the current pulls me away,

And the tears of my past stain my cheeks again.

Reviews

[Zeph]

:o interesting,, good job :)

[The Turk]

Everyone wears a mask. Whether it be to fit in with society, hide our emotions, or to cover up our past. We all wear masks and some are more elaborate than others. Beautifully written. I loved this poem so much that it will be one of those poems that I won't easily forget about. Great poem and I can't wait to see another

[Rhianne Ney]

I'm going to shelve this in my library i love the way you wrote this down!

[Benjamin David]

I revere this anecdotal poem, wrapped within dolour and sombre. Well done

[Cynthia Man]

It's simply beautiful...The sorrow of the poem is just so strong that I can feel it.. And I felt kinda relate to it at the same time, as I'd questioned myself as well... But then I'm sure writing and thinking can help one find themselves again...
A Wonderful write!

[Anne Timmins]

Good poem, very pleasing read

[Sky]

Such sadness, an isolation that comes with the feeling of disconnection with each other. That's the illusion. That we are disconnected. But the truth, I have learned, is that we are far more connected than we realize. For me, this poem speaks of that isolation and a painful childhood event. It also reminds me of a dream I once had. Thank you for sharing, Tai. Nice poem.

[Vanessa Pavelock]

I like the shift in the speaker's voice. Very real.

[Tom]

Very eloquent and beautifully written I really enjoyed this one. I love the release of emotion in the final stanza. Really well done.