The Caged Bird

The Caged Bird

     So depressing how he is separated

            From the world by all these small, metal bars

     How cheerless that it is treated so cruel

           Sometimes I wonder how it still has a pure heart

     If I were him, I'd be so unhappy

            Being a bird who can't spread his wings

     Given such a roughshod life at times

            I wonder how could he still happily sing

     I think I may know why he sings

            Given all these miserly things

     His cruel, cold world

            But he still accepts the world he lives in

     With the mental mind of good things

            He embraces the life he was given

Author's Note

It's my first poem ^ ^ Any comments and/or reviews are greatly appreciated :)

Reviews

[paul sal.....]

They are happy as long as there is food and water and warmth and sunshine, damn if there isn't a lesson there....Iiked your poem very much ...............

[Tai Ryens]

Intriguing thought, thank you!

[Bluefire]

I have a pet parakeet and often wish I could set him free or at least do something to make his life better. I hate keeping him in a cage but we have cats.. And you know how that works.
This poem made me sad. Now I feel like a horrible person. :P
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Oh, heavens, no, you've opened up the epiphany of mediocre and infant writing..;^;
Thank you, though, aha, I see how that works. Reason number eight why I can't get a cat

[Bluefire]

Lol I did not think it was mediocre or anything like infant writing. It was very good for a first poem.

[Baby Ricochet]

I wanted to read your first poem so I did. Wouldn't have known it was you but hey, we all evolve, right? Right!

[Tai Ryens]

Indeed, I adapted the beauty of dark poetry and a hopeless world.

[demureminds]

Hmm, clever approach on this one. Caged birds are often thought of as being miserable. But I like the concept in this mainly because it encourages people to accept their unfortunate situation rather than dwell upon it. Well penned.

[Tai Ryens]

You seriously went back this far to review this? Dang, haha. Thanks! Though, I could have sworn I buried this well . . .

[Swateek]

wow! it seems nice to me....and yes no spell errors.. :) :)

[Chris Taylor]

Great poem! I love the overall theme of the poem being to learn to live and be content with our circumstances. This "bird", happily sings to the glory of the Lord; no matter what is going on around them or in the world; a true worshiper's heart. I loved the rhythm of this piece and the imagery you weave throughout it. Nice work.

[Night]

Wow! Being your first poem, that is AMAZING! Keep writing! I'll be waiting for your next poem to come out! :P

[Tasha]

For your first poem it was amazing! You have true talent!! :) Keep up the wonderful work and writings.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[NightShade]

There is an exceptional wisdom in this piece. Acceptance is no deep mystery but most people seem to never grasp it. When something is "wrong" with our lives and we are most vexed, a careful examination of things will likely point to the real source of our trouble: Ourselves and the refusal to accept what IS. Excellent writing and you simply must continue doing so. The world is better for it...