An Ode To Sagitarius & Virgo

The eyes of the heavens twinkle
with our love,
forever a testament
to our nights spent
hand-in-hand as we whispered
sweet nothings into each other’s throats
beneath the blanket of the cold
with nothing but the glow of the
constellations above
and each other
for warmth.

It was in the sound of your voice
that even death did not faze me,
it was the flutter of a heart
and the blush upon your cheeks
that distracted
from a life that descended upon me
with such ferocity
as the fingers of mankind reached
for the heavens we took for granted.

‘Twas only chance that dawn
would shimmer with a love brighter
than any infatuated sigh
we shared night-after-night,
made more tragic
by the shimmer of humanity
shrouding the remains of our love
with their light of temptations.

I still rue the day when I did not realize
our love getting left in the dust
by the lights of the world
as I tried to keep ours as dark as possible
so that our gentle candle of a love
could remain the brightest feeling on Earth.

All the songbirds died
when the hum of a lightbulb
became the sound of nature,
when the lights of opportunity
singing from the rooftops
twinkled brighter than those testaments
of ours etched into the stars of the night,
under which I still dream of you.

Author's Note

An old piece that I forgot to post so many months ago.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

I'd been going over your poems, but like tonight my mind was always frazzled and tired and I thought, this amazing work diserves a fair chance, a decent review. Eh, so much for that.
Still, with what's left of my consciousness, I come to say that this is a most dazzling tale of love and it's rise and fall as the stars circling the sky.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Really, really late, but thanks for stopping by, Blue. :3

[Bluefire]

Always fun to visit a friend, Tai =3

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there was such a strong love here at one time....but when lights came on, she left...and the cold became colder, the nature of relationships told us that the time had come and temptations caused the break up of what had been a light within two hearts.

[Tai Ryens]

Yesss, you understood what I was trying to convey. Thank you for stopping by.

[Extant]

Nice.
But the last two stanzas are a little confusing, the last mostly because I think it is cut off.
Still, you're one of the only poet's that can write love poems that I can read without gagging . . . so. *Smile*

[Tai Ryens]

Oh damn, I didn't notice that. Thank you muchly for pointing it out, I've fixed it now.
Thanks for stopping by, Aphasia. Always a pleasure to hear your thoughts.

[Zahra]

All the songbirds died
when the hum of a lightbulb
became the sound of nature,
when the lights of opportunity

A beautiful romantic piece, well penned.

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you for your thoughts.

[wordman]

well this is certainly a beautiful poem of love

[Tai Ryens]

Thanks for stopping by.

[wordman]

you are welcome