I always believe that my thoughts are loud as the silence stood, numbing. That's the time I think the mind is such a complex river with tons of passages or tons of doors to pass through. The ending is quite just right for me... and I like it, like somehow I can relate to its voice. great work my friend.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you, Pax, always lovely to hear your thoughts.
That was wonderful work, but sorry what is "mimsy"? i didnt find that :/
i will be thankful to get an answer :)
thank you
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
'Mimsy' means somewhat underwhelming, or bland, and other adjectives pertaining to those two. Thank .. read more'Mimsy' means somewhat underwhelming, or bland, and other adjectives pertaining to those two. Thank you, stars are far.
love "mimsy" .. thank you for that! ;) how awful to be in that state of mind .. your poem for me borders between emotional and mental illness .. you have created strong tension says i ... the white noise is overwhelming especially today, with our constant electronic devices ... all we have to do is unplug :)
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Wouldn't be able to get into the Cafe if I did, and then where would I be? Aha, thanks for stopping.. read moreWouldn't be able to get into the Cafe if I did, and then where would I be? Aha, thanks for stopping by.
10 Years Ago
in a bistro writing on napkins and flirting with life and death .. ;) talking .. listening .. and be.. read morein a bistro writing on napkins and flirting with life and death .. ;) talking .. listening .. and being
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finally all the screeching sounds of life, of the world, all the craziness is something we get used to...
and we find ourselves just walking in the park, not hearing anything...everything starts having a dull finish to it.
insipid...
but the poem is not...the rocks.
jacob
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
It's always been a fascination of mine that the human mind could accustom to its environment so much.. read moreIt's always been a fascination of mine that the human mind could accustom to its environment so much that it views it all as normal, somewhat; a gross oversimplification but I find it fitting . Thank you for your thoughts.
There's some classic Tai in this. Change the word "thoughts" in the first stanza to "bones" and I'd know you were the culprit who wrote it if it were in braille and I have no clue how to read braille. That's how classic Tai it would be.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Ah, the perfect word! I had been struggling to find that word that would make that first stanza seem.. read moreAh, the perfect word! I had been struggling to find that word that would make that first stanza seem more... complete... but the imagination can only do so much on so little sleep. Thanks muchly!
I must start that I am not as active as I should be on this site, though I do tend to drop by every now and then and review what I can from friends and those whose works I enjoy. Currently, I am dippi.. more..