Caster of the Shadows

Hastily, you venture across a deprived meadow
and wander amongst broken home’s shattered glass,
pondering what bliss life truly can afford to give
whilst you sought love in the shadows you’ve cast

‘ Death beckons at me from the light at the end of the tunnel ’
you reasoned as to why it is the light that you shun,
yet I refrained to mention the way you’d fall apart when the
burning wick of candlelight failed to glow beneath the moon

Perhaps ‘tis intimacy that inspires trepidation within you,
or maybe the heartache of isolation that gives you such fright:
passionate gestures performed by shadows you claimed to love, whom
vanished whilst you smothered the flames to make love in the night

Woe, how I wish you’d love the caster of the shadows
instead of those that dare to depart in the darkness,
. . . if only you’d love the caster of the shadows
so that you would not dread so much the loneliness.

Author's Note

Criticism, anyone?
Photo courtesy of ssuunnddeeww of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

Wow Tai......wow. This is on a whole new level from what I remember......wow. Haha I honestly don't have a whole lot to say other than that this has left me speechless. Amazing Tai!!! (Also sorry I haven't been active a whole lot on Writers Cafe so yeah.....this is only coming nine months late haha. Better late than never!)

[Tai Ryens]

Aha, thank you, Riley! It has been awhile, and I was wondering whether you were coming back or not. Aha. Welcome back to the Cafe, regardless.

[Riley Bray]

Thanks! I'll be getting to the other RR's soon Tai!

[Einstein Noodle]

had to read several times at different times ... i like it better with each reading .. there is a lot of deep things in this i think ... "Caster of the Shadows" could be someone or something blocking the light and casting shadows ..could be the light itself that is the caster ...i believe the latter to be closer to the truth ... i think that first verse is exquisite .. revisiting our wounds ... thinking we deserve that misery again and again ... in the second verse this utter darkness falls over me .. third verse i take my own self evaluation ..we men certainly have troubles with intimacy ... and thank you for the hope of your last verse ... once we let go of things in the world and learn the kind of trust you speak of ..we find we are ok by ourselves ..alone but not lonely ..what a very good poem!
E.

[Tai Ryens]

Such a poignant interpretation, I do enjoy thoughts from fellow writers. Thank you, Einstein!

[Bluefire]

It's sad and beautiful at the same time. Like a violin.
I love the word play and the rhythm to this piece.
Well done. ^^

[Tai Ryens]

Thanks, Blue!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome! ^^

[melissa]

Awesome poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you!

[melissa]

Your welcome

[paul sal.....]

only criticism; why not step out into the light, there is so much unseen in the shadows

[Tai Ryens]

Aha, I'll consider. Thanks for stopping by, Paul.

[Rachelle]

For some reason, each time I want to review this, I get interrupted - either by a glitchy server or by something else and I have to read and reread it with new eyes each time. So pardon me if I get interrupted once again… I will send things via installment ….

[Tai Ryens]

That happens often to me, it helps to leave the window open for about five minutes while I do other things, aha.

[Rachelle]

Self-occlusion. Shunning to seek the light of self-knowledge and self-understanding, we would rather stay in the comfort zones of the dark. Fear, perhaps, of the unknown and of what Life has really destined for us - the trials and challenges we have to face to bring light to what we truly are and what we are capable of. No. Many of us chose to be mired in this world and its worldliness succumbing to the dictates of what is progressive, successful and desirable - never admitting that these are all ephemeral and that our true worth lies in seeking the light that is within us.

FINALLY!

[Rachelle]

Sorry it took so long. You have a WC gremlin on this page.

[Tai Ryens]

What a poignant review! Thank you, Rachelle, always enjoy your reviews!

[Rachelle]

My sentiments are mutual, T.!

[New Theory]

It really was a very dark and fitting representation of what loneliness is like sometimes, it reminded me of the numerous times when I used to sit alone in my room with no one there. It hurt a lot. Awesome writing Taite, keep those awesome heartfelt pieces coming.

[Tai Ryens]

I know the feeling well, thanks, Theory.

[Baby Ricochet]

Sad, depressing, like really big bottle of prozac depressing. Lonely and empty. I'm starting to miss my girlfriend and she's going to be home in about twenty minutes. Quite an effective piece Tai. This one's a keeper

[Tai Ryens]

Effective is always nice, aha, glad to know I can sway emotions. Thanks, Baby!