Rusty? Hardly! Tai whatever you write you always write it so perfectly. This fits like a puzzle to my poem Contemporary haha. I can practically see the same characters reflected in this as in mine. The imagery is absolutely flawless...oh how I love your writing. Until next time Tai.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
I'll have to check that out soon, always lovely to hear from you, Riley.
Beautiful imagery, I can see it as I'm reading your poem which means it's good writing; where does the dust go when it's not frolicking in the sun?..............
I love it! A beautiful description of something so simple. The use of personification is lovely and really adds to the poem. This definitely isn't what I would call rusty :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Personification is probably one of my favored writing tactics, just something about me, aha. Thank .. read morePersonification is probably one of my favored writing tactics, just something about me, aha. Thank you; I say it's rusty because I feel I could have done more with this piece than what came out.
This brought back a memory of when I was little and snuck into my sister's bed. Once I was there she told me she'd be back and suck out to a party. I was all alone in her dark room and the only thing I ever wished to look at was the nightlight at the foot of the bed. I used to half close my eyes and see the beams of the light extend to the furthest reaches of my vision. If was quite fascinating at the time. xD
Very nice write.
A++
This poem actually drew inspiration from a similar situation, although different variables. I keep .. read moreThis poem actually drew inspiration from a similar situation, although different variables. I keep curtains closed and I wallow in the ocean of sheets for hours before even CONSIDERING getting up, it's common knowledge about me. And I would look upon the dancing flecks and I'd go, wow! If only I could be as active as they are, forever swaying in the gentlest of breezes, what a way to exist!
Thanks, Blue!
10 Years Ago
What a nice way to describe them though, as if they were living and could flinch away. ^^
No p.. read moreWhat a nice way to describe them though, as if they were living and could flinch away. ^^
No problem.
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