Slivers

Slivers

A Poem by Tai Ryens
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Dust frolics in the air highlighted by a sliver of light . . .

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dust frolics in the air highlighted

by a sliver of light peeking in

my bedroom through a crack

in closed curtains


I observe it somberly

bearing a longing

much too intense

as I reach out to caress

one of the little dancers


my heart wrenches

as she flinches

© 2014 Tai Ryens


Author's Note

Tai Ryens
I've gotten rusty, I know.

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Rusty? Hardly! Tai whatever you write you always write it so perfectly. This fits like a puzzle to my poem Contemporary haha. I can practically see the same characters reflected in this as in mine. The imagery is absolutely flawless...oh how I love your writing. Until next time Tai.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

I'll have to check that out soon, always lovely to hear from you, Riley.
Beautiful imagery, I can see it as I'm reading your poem which means it's good writing; where does the dust go when it's not frolicking in the sun?..............

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, friend!
paul sal.....

10 Years Ago

MY pleasure, please check out some of mine
I love it! A beautiful description of something so simple. The use of personification is lovely and really adds to the poem. This definitely isn't what I would call rusty :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

Personification is probably one of my favored writing tactics, just something about me, aha. Thank .. read more
This brought back a memory of when I was little and snuck into my sister's bed. Once I was there she told me she'd be back and suck out to a party. I was all alone in her dark room and the only thing I ever wished to look at was the nightlight at the foot of the bed. I used to half close my eyes and see the beams of the light extend to the furthest reaches of my vision. If was quite fascinating at the time. xD
Very nice write.
A++

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

This poem actually drew inspiration from a similar situation, although different variables. I keep .. read more
Bluefire

10 Years Ago

What a nice way to describe them though, as if they were living and could flinch away. ^^
No p.. read more
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If this is rust, I'd like to see what the shine looks like...there's much depth to these simple few lines...I love it, the imagery is awesome Tai.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

I'm flattered, aha, thank you, Frieda
Tai my young friend, you are an old soul. Excellent poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

10 Years Ago

Aha, I wonder if my soul has wrinkles. Thank you!

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Added on February 12, 2014
Last Updated on February 12, 2014
Tags: dust, love, poem, depression, death, longing, long, hope

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Tai Ryens
Tai Ryens

Bay Area, CA



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