Whispering Eyelids

Your name whispers hurricanes amid emptiness,

churning twisters of voice salivated

from the delicious swamp of eyes;

whiskeyed to the point of disorientation

and dancing with devils.

I'd merrily unstitch those lips, dear lover,

but I'm afraid I just don't quite

possess the talent to do so;

how unfortunate it must be,

to live,

silenced by death.

Nightmares articulated at the thought of 

those-,

your eyes,

and let me tell you,

they frightened God himself.

Author's Note

Photo courtesy of fudaryli of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[Extant]

I had to laugh, especially for that last line.
It's incredible how you take something that is beautiful, the body, and describe it in a grotesque way that isn't exactly repulsing, it makes it much more interesting in fact.

"To live,
silenced by death"

In all honestly, I'm not quite sure what to make of this line. In my mind it speaks of someone with loved ones dropping around them so frequently that, even though they live, death is always with them. It fits in the poem in some twist that is uniquely you, but simaltaneously is out of place . . .

[Tai Ryens]

Wondrous thought, and it suits the poem well. I wrote this of Love, so I suggest rereading with the concept of courtship fresh in the head.
I thank you kindly.

[Extant]

My pleasure, Tai.

[Bluefire]

Amazing!
It was like a beautiful nightmare.
Dark, seductive and frightening.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Thanks, Blue.

[Bluefire]

You're welcome!

[Writer #00]

Interesting. I like your writing style...it seems to find the darkness in beauty and bring it to light...if that makes sense.

[Tai Ryens]

It does, for behind every accomplishment is a shadow.

[Writer #00]

So true.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

use of vocabulary and metaphor is stunning, simply rivertting

[Tai Ryens]

I amn't quite fond of this, thank you.

[Rhianne Ney]

all of the lines used here are powerful. good job!

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

There is a lucid, playful and articulate tone in this, I enjoyed the paradoxes of this canvas. Good work Tai!

[Tai Ryens]

Why, thank you!

[Frieda P]

Holy cats, this is amazing, made me shudder. That photo is off the charts as is your writing. Dark and awe inspiring!

[Tai Ryens]

I am flattered, thank you.

[Ohhhwillow]

This is DARK.. I fcking love it! You seduce the writer with words lavished in love, we want so badly to see those lips, to feel what you feel.. A taunting, beautiful piece Tai. As always

[Tai Ryens]

Hmn.. I thank you kindly.

[Baby Ricochet]

I'd merrily unstitch those lips dear lover has a necrophilia tinge to it. That's some Tai poetry right there.

[Tai Ryens]

Literal meanings always seem to amuse and entice me. Thanks.