The Sunken Stone

I weep to the rhythm

of pebbles dripping into the pond;

resonating the voices from within

my heart's depths, and beyond.

Faint traces of my copy

lurk behind shimmering sunlight;

beneath the pirouette of sea

and trapped by blight.

For, you see, I may age and olden

despite this veil so golden;

but what you fail to see

is this dwindled pebble drowned at sea.

Author's Note

Photo courtesy of Mel Gannon / mahdesigns of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[paul sal.....]

Most of the sea is teaming with life, perhaps the pebble will be reborn; very nice writing, full of imagery and poignant word combination; looking forward to reading more....

[Tai Ryens]

Such is an enticing thought, p Salinger, thank you for reviewing!

[Bluefire]

Very interesting piece, I may have a vague idea of what it's about but every time I go to grasp it, it runs farther away.
Anyway, the imagery and execution of the poem was perfect.
Well done!

[Tai Ryens]

Ahhh, such an old piece. I'm almost ashamed. Thank you!

[Bluefire]

Ashamed, what for? It is amazing! Don't be ashamed. ^^ No problem, I enjoyed it.

[akihsna]

: Seriously man, I think it's my first time ever appreciating dark and sinister poems THAT much!
You're real good at penning all of those sombre words (Y)
Great job, Tai :)
And you're only 14...Wow.

[Pax]

wow, the imagery is mind blowing...
such deep sadness you are facing in your writes...

Faint traces of my copy
lurk behind shimmering sunlight;
~ reminds me of the facade everybody is wearing everyday...
awesome as always my friend.

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

oh my goodness...thats so well written

[That_Girl]

I have no idea how you do it at 14. You write good s**t, very good s**t. Bravo.

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you, it means a lot.

[Baby Ricochet]

Tai the first stanza is beautiful. Outstanding job young man.

[Tai Ryens]

Baby R has called my work beautiful. That means something. Thanks, hehe.