Hollow

Hollow

A Poem by Tai Ryens

'Twas a burden to have

control etched deep into

my wooden ligaments:

strings meant to be played

by the players with knowledge

of how to assign a voice

within my hollow innards.

And yet so, so, so many people

beg me to escape from your

clutches; claiming that I am but

a plaything used only for

entertainment and pleasing of others.

Do they not see that I am hollow

either way? Destined to disappear

if not for you?

Is it so hard to fathom that

I would be tossed into a landfill;

lying lifeless in the dirt if not for you?



© 2012 Tai Ryens


Author's Note

Tai Ryens
Photo courtesy of ~RainbowRandomness on Deviant Art.

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I imagined a puppet on a string at first, but after reading some of the comments below, I suppose a string instrument could also be described in this. Nonetheless, it was a great poem. The dependency of the character of another in the poem is unfortunate, but often times that can happen if we care enough for the seemingly "antagonist" of our lives.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great poem. It has a deep story that keeps the reader interested in it. I thought of a guitar. I see you were thinking of a viola but since there was no mention of a bow I didn't think of that. Anyways, good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Being the puppet master carries many responsibilities. The picture aids this poem. I didn't look at it until after the reading. And my mind went to a violin or a cello. Like you puppet, dependent upon a master's touch in order to live.
Well written.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

12 Years Ago

Indeed, I had music in mind when reading this. To be more exact; the viola. However, puppets were .. read more
A sad piece. Being used for others entertainment by someone you love, you know that this is what theyre doing but you accept it because without the person you love then you feel that you'll be nothing....just floating pointlessly though existance....this is what I got from this poem. Nicely done Tai

Posted 12 Years Ago


Tai Ryens

12 Years Ago

Spot on! Though I did vaguely refer to suicide by stating I lie in the dirt, hehe . . . I'm afraid.. read more
Twistedme

12 Years Ago

Nope, I did pick that up at the end aswell....to be honest I couldve written a few paragraphs about .. read more

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Added on August 11, 2012
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Tags: dark, puppet, love

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Tai Ryens
Tai Ryens

Bay Area, CA



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