Rest

Rest

A Poem by Tai Ryens

Stale boots tap as they abrade stepping stones

Etched with memories of those beneath;

Fatigued eyes scan the meadow counting roses,

Expecting results identical to counting sheep.

 

No longer can I endure the torture of the slenderest hand

Hovering above me with an eternal tick-tock;

Nor can I abide the grudging pupils of a faint madman

Scrutinizing me from glass as if he were a hawk.

 

Nonexistent thoughts bellow in my minds prison,

As I count off the seconds until I am released;

I desire nothing more nor less than to escape insomnia,

Reason being that I may finally rest in peace.

 

© 2012 Tai Ryens


Author's Note

Tai Ryens
Not too satisfied with the ending. I may tweak that in the near future; in the meantime, enjoy.

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Very well done as usual:) the imagery in the first stanza made me feel as if I was walking through a cemetery. Don't know if that's what you meant but it gave me that mental picture. Your use of language is dark and elegant. The 2nd stanza was vuage and made me want to read in deeper to decipher the meanings. Another great poem:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tai Ryens

12 Years Ago

Indeed, that was what I intended. I thank you kindly for your kind reviews!
Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

No problem:) you never cease to impress me



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Another amazing write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree; it gave me a cemetery feeling. Nicely done.
Btw, I like your new picture lol. :3

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well done as usual:) the imagery in the first stanza made me feel as if I was walking through a cemetery. Don't know if that's what you meant but it gave me that mental picture. Your use of language is dark and elegant. The 2nd stanza was vuage and made me want to read in deeper to decipher the meanings. Another great poem:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tai Ryens

12 Years Ago

Indeed, that was what I intended. I thank you kindly for your kind reviews!
Lost in Wonderland

12 Years Ago

No problem:) you never cease to impress me
I loved this poem it has great imagery and an details. i think the ending was fine. it pointed out what you were talking about and had no idea that it was about insomnia until you told us. great poem Tai!!! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is..amazing! Loved the imagery, and the ending isn't that bad, though. It quite fits! But of course, its your poem! :P

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 26, 2012
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Tai Ryens
Tai Ryens

Bay Area, CA



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