She selected her coat with care, blue it was, her favourite colour, just like the sky.
She wore the butterfly brooch,
the one from the charity shop, gaudy enamel it was, cheap, but cheerful,
had it pinned,
carefully, on the lapel it was, of her sky blue coat.
The coat was charity too,
reminded her of her grandfather, something about the smell, a catalyst for long forgotten memory.
He had smoked a pipe,
fragrant tobacco, bought in town every Saturday morning, when she was a little girl and he took her shopping, bought her the brooch out of his pension for her tenth birthday,
It was the grandfather
who had held her little hand in his big gnarly one, gently as they walked.
The old man
with faded blue eyes, that looked just like the colour of the sky on the bus ride home, who one day flew away and never came back.
What a compelling tangle of observations & emotions! I love the way "blue" is a theme thru-out your piece, wisely using the color to denote mood & connect life chapters. I love the way you describe details with care & this shows us how much some simple object means to the one who has little. You do a great character study thru mainly observations, which I love to read when done well (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
I enjoyed the detail in the language in this poem, right down to the poignant ending. Memories of a Grandfather, and loss from the point of view of a child. Nicely done Bob.
such an emotive write laced with love. tugs at heartstrings. simply memorable, touching and wonderful. leaves an impression that is not soon forgotten. outstanding ... :)
Thank you all (three) of you kindly. Doesn't really bother me whether or not folk leave a review. I just like to write, something I didn't do for a while.
Oh my goodness. This doesn't just tug at the heartstrings, it tears them in two.
'It was the grandfather
who had held her little hand
in his big gnarly one,
gently
as they walked.'
So tender, so beautifully written that I genuinely had a tear in my eye. Like emmajoy, I cannot understand why so few of those who have read it have not bothered to comment.
' The coat was charity too, ~ reminded her of her grandfather, ~ something about the smell, ~ a catalyst for long forgotten memory. ' That single stanza stands as a story of its own...
Such a smooth, sweet chain of being.. ending in a sadness that hits the heart! Your words are so gently laid, their meanings really do paint a picture of how it was, how blue eyes and the people, young, elderly, shared love and left behing memories. Goodness know why your visitors have left without a word.. this is a poignant, finely written poem .. truly is.
Fifty plus, humdrum job now, but spent awhile doing other stuff. Mostly write about my experiences, but also have a taste for the macabre; but don't worry it's all in my imagination; or is it? :)))
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