Locked Inside

You know I feel for you.

I say

"I love you"

All the time.

But do you know

I have a secret place,

Locked Inside

Where my love continues to grow.

Where my love continues to exist,

JUST  WAITING FOR YOU.

 

My worry ... my tears

Joy and sadness

Intense emotions ...

All expressions of this hidden intensity;

MY EVER EXPANDING LOVE.

 

This secret place overflows from time to time.

Too many thoughts ...

Too much to feel ...

TO MUCH TO KEEP TO MYSELF.

 

But I do tell you.

I do extra things 'just because'.

I don't know what else to do.

I get lost within it.

I'm striving to share this locked love with you ...

BUT ARE YOU READY?!?!

Reviews

[C.J.]

wow i realy like this poem the last line of every vers was loud in my mind and it helped the poem alot good job.

[Poetically Always Ashle..]

Very nice piece here. I am not so sure I like the structure, but that isn't the point here. The flow is good, but I don't know about the "?!?!" at the end, just seems pointless and seems like an email in a way to me and the capital lines just seem like your yelling, but let me say that is only one opinion and maybe someone else may like it, but I say lose it. Other than that I redid your poem (hope you don't mind) in a way I would like to see it and for you to understand what I'm talking about... if you like my revision then use it or customize to your wants.

"You know I feel for you.
I say "I love you" all the time.
But do you know
I have a secret place,
a secret place locked inside?

It's where my love continues to grow.
Where my love continues to exist.

Waiting for you.

My worries, my tears
both joy and sadness.
Intense emotions,
expressions of hidden intensity;

My ever expanding love.

This secret place overflows from time to time.
Too many thoughts, too much to feel.

Too much to keep to myself.

But I do tell you.
I do extra things 'just because'.

I don't know what else to do.
I get lost within it.

I'm striving to share this locked love with you
but are you ready,
are you ready?"