Fairy Tale

Here's a fairytale 
That ends pretty well 
The ever after isn't the pretty part 

It's when you lied 
When I cried 
It's when we sighed 
And said goodbye 
Oh this is our time 
Oh this is our goodbye 
I am so sorry 
But then again you won't worry

Author's Note

Ahhh the beginning is just so great until you really find the truth about someone and how horrible they really are inside.

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

Beginnings are beautiful...beautifully deceptive. I like your direct approach. (I seem to enjoy that emotion much more...I've been working on expanding my trains in thought...I'll let you know which tracks to jump..lol ;) Anyway back to your piece here, simple when it involves heart ache that's raw is always theraputic. The ending says all we need to sum up this person:
"I am so sorry
But then again you won't worry"
Such an unfeeling soul..this part reads as though YOU are sorry for his lacking of character...that is such a deep perception to wrangle...yet you said it all with 4 words. Well thought out and direct poem. I enjoyed this piece very much. :)
The heart of a survivor...nothing screams strength and endurence like that does :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

like how it comes together.
excellent write.

[The XYZ Writer]

I know what you mean. Some people may really be themselves, and others quite deceptive of who they are. Such a true poem. :)

[André-J-Franklin]

Fairy start happy not it doesn't me they end the same why. There's a message in this of the moral to this story. Great read by the way

[Ami N.]

I can feel the sorrow. Sad, yet beautifully written piece :)

[JRB]

departing sorrow,nice write

[E.V. Black]

I admired the overall message of this, but I think that the last two lines of the second stanza ruined the flow of the poem. The flow of the poem was wonderful until I read those lines. I think that you should tweak those two lines a bit until they sound better.

Though I now realize that you probably meant to do that. Everything in the poem is perfect until the very end.

[Bare trees]

I've heard the horror stories and it's sad. I like the fact that you didn't make the poem too long. You said what needed to be said. The realization that the other person is so uncaring is the part that really hurts. Well done.

[WindSong]

Beautiful! Your poem has a very soft touch and it almost seems to be weeping! It speaks volumes from your heart! Less is so much more! Gorgeous poetry!

WindSong