I Wanna Be

I Wanna Be

A Poem by Pointblank

All alone with this pain in my heart

Your so far away

We’ve talked on the phone once or twice

It just defines this empty space

 

I wanna be

Be where you are

In your arms

In your bed

Make real these visions

Visions in my head

Please let me be

I wanna be

Be where you are

 

Thinking about you tonight

The things you said to me

It can come true

I just need to find you

 

I wanna be

Be where you are

In your arms

In your bed

Make real these visions

Visions in my head

Please let me be

I wanna be

Be where you are

PB 8/9/08

 

 

© 2008 Pointblank


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This read very musical for me and I have to say that I feel like you read my mind. "Make real these visions
Visions in my head Please let me be I wanna be Be where you are" The honesty and truth in just those few lines is amazing. I am adding this to my favorites.

Posted 16 Years Ago


before i even read your poetry, i must say i far more appreciated your biography section. How you described yourself had to have been well thought out, and well worded to have the affect it did. In your poetry, Everything flows. Everything has its independent thought, everything meticulously put into place to have the right affect and feeling portrayed. i said the following to another writer, "sad part of this poetry is no one can fully understand how you feel when you wrote it". This is an amazing piece. You have taken you emotional and turned it into art, passion, sadness, and regret. To love someone that much and not be "in their arms or their bed" but care for them enough to write this so they may know exactly how you feel, is priceless. Again, wonderfully written and greatly admired.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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