The Awakening

Awakened from my restless sleep

A commanding voice both strong and deep

rythmic tap tapping against my pain

brought humbling, soothing, gentle rain

Moments of clarity occur

in the darkness of my gloom

suttle strength and hope appear

fearless in my room

Then I waited in the stillness

of the quiet calm

and felt you slip away

speaking soft and somber tones

with the dawning of the day

What wonder in the message

So different from the norm

The fresh and careful cleansing

of a passing thunderstorm.

5/9/08  PB

Author's Note

should I have left the "pain" as is or used "pane" as in window....

Reviews

[The Mad Prophet]

I thought it was good the way it was. I love storms, and this discribed the feeling of how strong a storm can get. Very well done.

[Lee Wilson]

hmm, a window pane would show that your transparent, able to see into, or to look into something, where as pain would be a reference to being hurt ...Its a toughy on that one...I think though in this case Pane would be moe with waht your are writing,