can you hear me

can you hear me

A Poem by gimpy

I live without meaning.

Each day my heart hurts more.

does anyone hear my tears.

I give and give until there is nothing to give.

I live in a house without shelter,

can you hear my wants.

I try and stand for he who can not walk

I help who can not help themselves

do I not talk or do you not listen.

I hope for the people who have no hope

I give faith to the people without.

do you hear my dreams.

do you hear my want.

my needs.

can you hear my wants.

can you hear me.

© 2010 gimpy


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A truly inspirational poem which expresses the need to be heard and listened to and not to be ignored or cast aside because of lack of interest or desire.Your poem really touches the senses and within the writing there is a feeling that someone is suffering deep down.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow! this is very moving, full of vivid imagery and emotion! Thank You for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very strong poem. It pulled at me. The strongest line for me is
"I lived in a house without shelter."
If the person in the poem hopes for people without hope and has faith for those without, it would
appear he/she is not living without meaning. I think you might want to look at this
juxtaposition. The sense I am getting is feeling invisible, the feeling of not
meaning something to those close. Hope this helps. Use spellcheck.
All the best.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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