It's A Beautiful Thing

There is a butterfly with broken wings,
next to the canary which-
does not sing.
Who lands on the bell,
that does not ring;
Where it should shine in sun,
but light it does not bring.
The world is dark-
Everyone.
Everything,
Life can be cut short,
like scissors to a string,
No one is left to rule.
No one to be our king.
We have to depend on on ourselves.
Freedom is a beautiful thing.
 

Reviews

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

An excellent piece of writing just as mother nature would have written herself in such a splendid creative and colourful design, i can see all of the wonderous natural things you so eloquently describe here like all things bright and beautiful the lord god made them all al things wisw and wonderful however they are big or small.
Nature can be cruel too and everything feeds of something we are lucky as humans because we are top of the food chain.

[Ama May Cooper]

apart from the slightly forced ryhming. it was a very true down to earth an honest piece

[Stacey Watts]

This was a very written piece. It says so much. We do have to be the ones who secure our own freedom. It can be taken away so quickly and easily if we are not careful. Excellent piece.

[Twilight]

This is a well written homage, to the value and joy of freedom in our lives! A few of the metaphors are rather intelligent, and unique. Also, this poem reminds the reader, that the world is a dark place, we need to rely on "ourselves". Indeed, there are many different meanings in this piece, of a philosophical nature. Furthermore, this is not just "blind" philosophical reasoning. Instead, the writer covers themes which are as important today, as when freedom was first appreciated by the humankind!

Thankyou, for entering this in my "FREE SPIRITS" Contest! I recommend other readers and reviewers, to share this poem amongst their friends, and pay close attention to the concepts which it highlights! Freedom really is, "A Beautiful Thing".....

[QuietPoet]

This is so true and beautiful. I liked this. It poured truthfullness and it was wonderful.

[Dominic Rosales]

The way you wrote this is very inspiring
The words this poem possesses is truly from the heart the lines are so welly set and make the best of sense
your talent is greater than you probably think, and this is probably one of your best poems I have read
your imagination reaches heights that I have yet to encounter
my favorite lines from this poem are Life can be cut short, like scissors to a string,
No one is left to rule. No one to be our king.

they are very genuine and make sense of the whole thing
keep it up

[Andrew'sWonderland]

I must agree with the others, Great Job!!! I loved the metaphors and the message behind it!!

[Sasavet]

This is really beautiful, it's kind of haunting as well. At first I saw it to be like...the flaws we all have are beautiful, then it morphed into how all we have could end in a second but we go on to live it anyways, and how beautiful that courage is. I agree with this 100% and I love the overall idea of this.... to live with complete passion and to embrace all your flaws, for everyone and everything is beautiful. It's a message people forget too often, but this reminds us all. Thank you for writing this :) It reminds me of a quote from the movie "Little Children." It's something like... "Do you know why people are divine? It's because everything could be over in a second, and we go on and love anyways. Animals don't do that." That's not exactly it but it's something like that :P

This touched me very deeply... it was a reminder I needed and that I think most of us need at some point. This belongs in my favourites :)

Amazing

[Wharton]

I like how the poem turns at the end. It begins with illustrations of failed images, the butterfly, the canary, the bell. This is reiterated nicely with:

"The world is dark-
Everyone.
Everything,"

For me that echoed it's reiteration.

But then it changed. We are allowed to see, the possibilities when there is freedom...and so maybe being alone, on or own isn't such a bad thing. One thing for you to look at: Line 14, I think there is an excess word you forgot to remove. It's a good poem to head to bed on, which I am doing now.

[Lydia]

I like this poem a lot. It has a lot of metaphors (or what could be metaphors) which leaves it open to a lot of different interpretations. That's a great thing in poetry because it means your poem can apply to just about anyone and just about any situation. Great write.