Writers Block

I know it's not a creative title but it's NOT your average writer's block poem! (at least I hope not:))

It's past bedtime now, but the craving still lingers,

my thoughts all lay dead 

like the pen in my hand.

I want to write words that feel good on my fingers,

that come from my head 

all prepackaged and planned.

My mind often wanders. I try to stay steady,

but sleepy-eyed trances

keep logic at bay.

I trudge off to bed. As my eyelids grow heavy,

my thoughts exchange glances,

and come out to play.

Author's Note

In the second line, should it be 'lie' or 'lay'?

Reviews

[Melaniespace]

I'm not sure if it should be "lay" or "lie" but I like "lie". This poem is a great and a good exercise to get your creativity going. I also have one called Writer's Block for the same reasons as you. :)

some lines I like:

"I want to write words that feel good on my fingers,
that come from my head
all prepackaged and planned."

[Mira ThePoetess]

It's a good short poem, " want to write words that feel good on my fingers," I like this part .. the way you personified the thoughts is nice too, you used the verbs showing that. I like it ..

[laRagazza]

Thanks! I liked that line too (I know that sounds conceited but I really did:) because it describes the feeling really well when you really want to write something, but can't come up with an idea that is interesting enough. Thanks again for reviewing!

[Mira ThePoetess]

Any time :D

[Melaniespace]

Not conceited. Confident!

[Morgoth Azreal]

Not a bad poem, I like the flow of it. I will go look at your other work.

[laRagazza]

Thanks for your reviews!

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

i tink lay is what it sould be, yeah sleepy moments victored even the greatest of writters with you included. i like the desire to write that this poem potrays

[laRagazza]

Thanks! I was actually pretty tired when I wrote this poem, so I was in a good state to describe it! Thanks again for reviewing

[Mira ThePoetess]

I go for Lay as well .....

[Cristina]

Nice work here, I really like the poem. I think in the second line you mean 'lie' (definition: be in or assume a horizontal or resting position on a supporting surface -- sorry for ruining the mood of this great poem with this cold definition). Hmm if you ever search for words and are unsure about stuff www.thesaurus.com is a very nice website to get creative and improve. Check it out!

[laRagazza]

Thanks for reviewing! I'll give that website a look, too.

[conspicuousleaf]

I love this poem. It is structured well and is very interesting. I think that it should be "lay" in the second line.

[laRagazza]

Thanks! I'm glad to hear that it's structured well because I try to keep a good meter and everything with my poems, but I don't really know a lot about that stuff.