Forgotten

Just a poem..

Forgotten.

That is what she is.

No one remembers her name,

No one recalls the last time they saw her,

Even when she's always been here.

 

Do you see her as she walks by?
Or when she sits in the desk right next to you?

Do you have any memory of the silent girl

Who never speaks?

 

No one says hello,

No one offers help

When she's down on the ground.

Does anyone show any sympathy,

For the girl that's gone through so much?

 

The forgotten girl walks through the halls,

Ignored by many,

Invisible to most,

No one sees the lifeless eyes.

 

The girl everyone once knew

Is now forgotten.

Changed forever by some unknown force.

 

 

Author's Note

So what'd you think??

Reviews

[Miss Reckoning]

It's nice.
Your on the right track and you seem extremely creative and yet this could be way better.
By this I do not mean that it is bad in any way. Just that it's good and it can be amazing.
It's your choice to take my advice or not and edit it, for it is your work and not mine.
However i think this piece would be much better if you used past tense throughout the whole thing.
For example;
Do you have any memory of the silent girl
Who never speaks?
I think that would be much better if it was; Do you have any memory of the silent girl. Who never spoke?
Just my opinion though.
=]

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Reckoning with Death,

This is very nice. Very insightful and penned exceptionally well. You put the emotions down clearly and cleanly on paper. Good job.

Best regards,

Rick

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like it! Sadly, there are many forgotten people like the woman in your poem. Sometimes they are to blame because they choose invisibility for fear of being put down by the cruel.

Sal