Smoke

Smoke.

Rich and full of depth, leaking the words I can't bear to say.

It tells the story of us and what could have been.

The pictures begin to paint themselves, like poison dancing gracefully along fragile lips.

Night's full of endless possibilities and what I thought could be my forever.

A mind I wanted to get lost in, hiding from the monsters lurking within.

Arms I wanted to sleep in, the ones that would deliver me into a whole new world.

Lips I needed to taste, sharing sweet secrets that slowly intoxicated us.

Intoxication is a beautifully ironic thing.

There is no control yet so much strength and courage.

Like you can conqueror any mountain, any beast or demon that infiltrates your path.

Well you were my demon and I believed I could conqueror you.

But you are bigger than any mountain and more vicious than any beast.

You, my sweet beauty, ripped me to shreds and laughed at the sight.

Yet I begged for your painfully sweet touch.

I ached for the pain just to know I was alive.

Life pulses through my fingertips as I run them along the leather.

This jacket permanently represents you and me.

The fibers have been doused in the smells that embody our time.

I cringe at the thought that something so small,

could capture something so colossal.

My burning passion for you.

Your destruction of me.

The sad part is, 

I would willingly douse myself again.

But I will refrain and I will grow stronger than,

the smoke. 

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

Yet another tragic love affair . . . you managed to convey your emotion well in this piece, and the metaphor of smoke fit perfect.

Nights (Night's)

The only advice I'd offer is too make your lines more concise, you have some long wind lines, then short and simple, then back, which makes it read a bit choppy in places.

[kylie giamba]

Thank you for your compliments and criticism, I appreciate it!

[Matt Fellows]

A great chapter, a really vivid an emotional piece filled with raw power contrasting with weakness and emotion, a great read :).

[kylie giamba]

Thank you once again!

[A. Amos]

The last lines were mesmerizing, I was lost in your beautiful story...

[kylie giamba]

Thank you for your kind words!

[wordman]

well I loved this story will come back and read more
welcome aboard

[kylie giamba]

Thank you very much :)

[Lucid Dreamer]

Outstanding! I enjoyed the whole story and thought it was well planned and written. Good job :)

[kylie giamba]

Thank you so much, I appreciate it! xo

[Lucid Dreamer]

You're welcome.